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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-04-24 05:34 AM


tree fingers touch shimmer sky places
morning shows her bare sun ends
from under clouds that slipped
on purpose perhaps
when a winking ocean touched
with sea spray kiss there
on belly skin horizon

you are mist on window glass now
your hair is wet grass
I watch your eyes and your mind
as you are outside in love place thoughts
you are nature in her nude
along the surf you run with nothing
but smile mouth and laugh eyes

I am quiet room of memory
I fit around you with thought
and instant replay of touch
of sigh sound songs
of tremble voice whispers
your back reaches to me
and fills my surround arms

night waves with  shadow hands
and smiles star flicker good-bye
as he carries his indigo blanket
under arm to his valley of nap
we wave too with our eyes
and whisper invitations for his return
after day tells us love word stories

we are sounds of morning now.......


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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2002-04-24 06:20 AM



There are soft winds in Kansas
the ones you don't hear
       but feel against your face
warm air sweetening
       memories of time

they welcome the morn
       these soft wind sighs

Dark Stranger
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2 posted 2002-04-24 06:33 AM


sunshine
you are that horizon of warm
when you reply..thank you

JamesMichael
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3 posted 2002-04-24 06:46 AM


nice Dark...James
serenity blaze
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4 posted 2002-04-24 07:01 AM


you are outside in love place thoughts
wish i were there now. oh. well. I am halfway there.

A work of art, m'friend.

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2002-04-24 07:08 AM


James, humble thanks amigo

Serenity..half way there...mmmm
that is sooo close, thank you lady

Janet Marie
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6 posted 2002-04-24 08:13 AM


tree fingers touch shimmer sky places
morning shows her bare sun ends

from under clouds that slipped
on purpose perhaps
when a winking ocean touched
with sea spray kiss there
on belly skin horizon

you are mist on window glass now
your hair is wet grass

I watch your eyes and your mind
as you are outside in love place thoughts
you are nature in her nude
along the surf you run with nothing
but smile mouth and laugh eyes

I am quiet room of memory
I fit around you with thought

=====================================

You make it real hard to pick fave lines DS
As I was reading this I was trying to put my finger on what "it is" about your poetry that makes it so uniquely you...and I think I would have to say that its a delightful, heady, combination of imagery, sultry, sensual undercurrents and a gift of personification( see the lines I bolded above to prove my point) that turns your imagery and metaphor into poetry that bends the mind and sates the senses...and that poet sir is a very very cool thing.

Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch

Jackson Browne

Dark Stranger
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7 posted 2002-04-24 08:22 AM


Janet Marie...your replys are poems
are dreams in word undergarments
thank you sweet poetess for your eyes
and mind..

Mistletoe Angel
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8 posted 2002-04-24 08:34 AM


"night waves with  shadow hands
and smiles star flicker good-bye
as he carries his indigo blanket
under arm to his valley of nap
we wave too with our eyes
and whisper invitations for his return
after day tells us love word stories

we are sounds of morning now......."




(smiles) I just love the colors and the serenity you tone your pieces with, sweet friend, this too had me dreaming away, hearing the sparrows sing this morning! (big hugggsssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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9 posted 2002-04-24 08:53 AM


I am quiet room of memory
I fit around you with thought
and instant replay of touch
of sigh sound songs
of tremble voice whispers
your back reaches to me
and fills my surround arms


you are ya know....
DS~the tender side of you




Lauren~

~Sinking fast into
an ocean of you,
what if I told you,
what if I said
that I love you
do we dare cross
that line between your
heart and mine~

SEA
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with you
10 posted 2002-04-24 08:55 AM


"I am quiet room of memory
I fit around you with thought
and instant replay of touch
of sigh sound songs"

this part, reminds me of someone I miss, and gives me a smile

Dark Stranger
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11 posted 2002-04-24 08:57 AM


noah, thank you my friend..

lauren, part of me yes..soft, hard, changing as the moments change..thank you babe

SEA, it pleases me to make you smile..hope all is well..hugs too

[This message has been edited by Dark Stranger (04-24-2002 09:01 AM).]

Enchantress
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12 posted 2002-04-24 09:11 AM


Dark~May I just 'sigh' deeply...
and say 'thank you' for
making my eyes smile?
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Gentle Spirit
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13 posted 2002-04-24 09:14 AM


I am quiet room of memory
I fit around you with thought
and instant replay of touch
of sigh sound songs
of tremble voice whispers
your back reaches to me
and fills my surround arms


night waves with  shadow hands
and smiles star flicker good-bye
as he carries his indigo blanket
under arm to his valley of nap
we wave too with our eyes
and whisper invitations for his return
after day tells us love word stories

we are sounds of morning now.......

DS at his best yet again.  May I thank you dark one for the smile you have brought this morning, and the sigh, and even more....for the beautiful memory... Thanx babe....  Your tender side is beautiful...




Like a red brick,
in a white wall
somebodies brush
forgot to paint...
lonely....(as sung by Tracy Lawrence..)

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (04-24-2002 09:19 AM).]

Dark Stranger
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14 posted 2002-04-24 09:16 AM


ms enchant...a pleasure to smile you...thank you for comeing by

gentle donna, slow hugs to you and thank you for the smile touch

Marge Tindal
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15 posted 2002-04-24 09:27 AM


DarkStranger~

'your back reaches to me
and fills my surround arms'


What *soft-smiling* memories this line stirs~
Thank you for the beauty of your poetic thoughts~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
         noles1@totcon.com                    

Silver Streak
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16 posted 2002-04-24 09:32 AM


you are nature in her nude
along the surf you run with nothing
but smile mouth and laugh eyes

Dark,

I am in awe of your reflection of God's Art.

((Dark))
-newell

Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com

Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

Dark Stranger
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17 posted 2002-04-24 09:36 AM


marge, bless you dear one for the sweet reviews.

silver, thank you sir for the walk by visit, so pleased it was warm images for you

Martie
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18 posted 2002-04-24 09:49 AM


DS

You write in the sky, a cloud, a sunrise, a melt of words, of you.  Beautiful!

Dark Stranger
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19 posted 2002-04-24 09:52 AM


ms martie..
your eyes are welcome
spend time there anytime

thank  you

Indigo
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20 posted 2002-04-24 01:49 PM


ageless ocean
displays her wet
under his blanket
of endless night

nothing before unseen,
still they touch
once more
as though for the very first time


Indigo


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21 posted 2002-04-24 01:52 PM


Once I got into the rhythm of it, I was really taken in.
Dark Stranger
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22 posted 2002-04-24 04:54 PM


Indigo, first times every time
virgin touches
and then erase memories
make it happen again

thank you babe..

BSquirrel..thank you for the time to get into it...enjoyed your  read

suthern
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23 posted 2002-04-25 12:02 PM


night waves with  shadow hands
and smiles star flicker good-bye
as he carries his indigo blanket
under arm to his valley of nap

I've watched many a morning arrive... but was so caught up in her glories I never watched the night depart... now, I know what I've been missing. *S*

This is stunning, DS... I enjoyed it very much!

SmittenKitten
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where the sky and horizon meet
24 posted 2002-04-25 12:34 PM



"tree fingers touch shimmer sky places
morning shows her bare sun ends
from under clouds that slipped
on purpose perhaps
when a winking ocean touched
with sea spray kiss there
on belly skin horizon"


DS~ I love how you bring landscapes to life...I love to see things through your eyes.  If I were swooner, I'd be swooning right now!  But instead I'll just sigh and let your words linger in my head as I start this day.

*hugs*
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.  
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

Dark Stranger
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25 posted 2002-04-25 04:31 PM


suthern, thank you so much my friend

ms smittykitty, your sighs are lovely, I thank you for them

snowpants
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26 posted 2002-04-25 07:25 PM


'I am quiet room of memory
I fit around you with thought
and instant replay of touch
of sigh sound songs
of tremble voice whispers
your back reaches to me
and fills my surround arms'

Beautiful imagery, DS...these lines are absolutely amazing...I'm more and more impressed with each read...

sp        

I've been down this road forever,
and the time has come to circle back home...

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