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a river, wild....
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a river, wild.... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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the sweetness of your lips in writhe-- eyes upon us as we lied; and still the fingers danced adept. across a ballroom'd kitchen floor, hiding hunger in our stance in curtsey of "may I have more?" into our knowing eyes of chant; across the fabled Styx of Hell-- the bloodied yell that screams "I can't." It be everywhere we go. Electric, nullifying trust-- yielding unto what's unknown. Fools can see. (a diadem's transparency...) No, we can't fool them... (kiss me, please?) in rhythm's rocking clasp of knees of the child in want's release... a river, wild, she breaks levee... [This message has been edited by serenity (04-24-2002 05:55 AM).] |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Karen How nice to see you. I found your words to be hauntingly beautiful, if that makes sense. You portray amazing images through your words and I really enjoyed this. I hope all is well with you and yours. Take care.......Sue Suetang |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
A wild river is never boring...enjoyed this...james |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
can see the surging froth of rapid flowing gush lucky banks that hold the edges of such a river enjoyed looking there |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
No, we can't fool them... (kiss me, please?) in rhythm's rocking clasp of knees of the child in want's release... a river, wild, she breaks levee... ============================= there is much I could say...but you already know...and you know that I know...so.... I will be a good moth and say... you took this metaphor and worked it to poetic perfection...made it your own. You are poetry baby  |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Wow, I love the metaphor and cadence of this poem, sweet friend, your passion flows down the page like this river in a hauntingly inspiring tone! (big hugggsssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Wow.... Damn.... *whimper* [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (04-24-2002 01:53 PM).] |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
OHMYGOSH!!....WOW!!! |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
flow on wild river, for there is none that can hold back your course excellent. . . just excellent. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*eyes twinkling with mischief* Sometimes a night out is so...INSPIRING!  Thanks to all... |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
We can't fool them. Fools can see. (a diadem's transparency...) No, we can't fool them... (kiss me, please?) in rhythm's rocking clasp of knees I won't tell you the image this poem brought to mind, at least...not here. Intense and other heavy stuff, with a twist. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
you have flooded my imagination with this, serene one  Excellent form and style!  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Wowzers! You should have a night out more often this is absolutely superb Serenity. ~* Sharon *~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Duncan, deer, Mysteria---you all see me through this---and I love you for it!!! (I guess it was that diadem's transparency, eh?  )A trio of treasure here, I thank you, THRICE. |
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