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Michael G
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since 2000-06-25
Posts 579
Nashville

0 posted 2002-04-24 01:10 AM


Having the thought of gentleness
sear its futile moment into my mind
on the first thought of a sagging day,
yes its only mid week once again.
Break open the eyelids for the millionth
time as soon as the bloody clock
starts screaming at my dreams of
destiny's lost, forgotten wonders.
Drag the body up to meet the cold
chill of a morning out of the beautiful
coverd heat that you made in the
night as you passed for semi dead.
Only now does your mind start to
activate in slow transition to the
fact that your alive, and that
the floor is damn cold.
The shower, the clothes, the food
that runs down your throat, the last second scramble to find your keys as you
scream past the door and to your car!
Only to see the saturday paper waiting for you.

© Copyright 2002 Michael G - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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1 posted 2002-04-24 01:26 AM


The shower, the clothes, the food
that runs down your throat, the last second scramble to find your keys as you
scream past the door and to your car!
Only to see the saturday paper waiting for you.


Very clever, and very apt description, of the monotone of existance that reverberates into conundrum....I am not sure which is worse, too much to do? Or nothing to do at all...   either way, it's tedious.

Enjoyed.

Jenn E
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since 2000-08-02
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Kelowna, BC, Canada
2 posted 2002-04-29 10:38 AM


That was great MG!  
Jenn E

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23
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By the Seaside
3 posted 2002-04-30 01:56 AM


Nice twist at the end!
Nothing like being a day late!  

Neat poem.

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Member Rara Avis
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Deep in the heart
4 posted 2002-05-01 09:47 AM


I loved the ending!  It might be nice to clean up your spelling to make the read easier
Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
5 posted 2002-05-01 09:52 AM


Michael G
An enjoyable read, thanks for posting.

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