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Morning Gathers in the Curtain

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Martie
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Morning gathers in the curtain
to displays a crimson light
dazzled through the slant of shading
across a flash of keen insight.

Delivered in the softest rustle
elfin feet are softly going
with the moon's own fingers quieting
to the sun’s more open flowing.

Now departs delicious sweet dream
yet lingers still profound delight
lays me down against this lapping
quiet water’s weaving light.

Pewter tinted stars devoured
by the cream that slithers in
whispering open up with listening
hark the softly growing din.

Blaze this tree in sunlit splendor
trace the flowering petal near
now I feel night’s sweet surrender
to the sun shine’s clean and clear.
________
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© Copyright 2002 Martie Odell-Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 04-23-2002 12:20 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Martie~
Such beauty fluttering through your curtained verse~

Just so very lovely dear sweet Sis~
Here's that *HUG*
Love you~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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2 posted 04-23-2002 12:28 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Martie,
It doesn't get much better than this. Love it.
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3 posted 04-23-2002 01:36 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Hi Martie!  Just popped in to tell you how beautiful this one is!!
~Hugs~
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4 posted 04-23-2002 01:38 PM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

Ms martie

seems a view here that is gentle
but has peek-a-boo eyes too

enjoyed it babe
Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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Delicate loveliness here... I love your play on words "quiet water’s weaving light"! Luscious phrase! I always enjoy your work so much!
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6 posted 04-23-2002 01:44 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Much enjoyed. Especially the part about pewter stars and cream.
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Picture Snoopy doing his happy dance...now see my feet fly....
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8 posted 04-23-2002 04:21 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel

"Blaze this tree in sunlit splendor
trace the flowering petal near
now I feel night’s sweet surrender
to the sun shine’s clean and clear."




(smiles) WOW!!! Oh my gosh, I love how the sun rise and sets in this poem like that dream she feels, sweet friend, this is breathtaking! (kiss on cheek) Your wonderful words always make me smile, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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9 posted 04-23-2002 07:14 PM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

I've been saving this one. I loved the title so much, it's a very tactile image, and the rest just flowed behind, like a drapery in pull. Soft and sensuous.

loved it.
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with the moon's own fingers quieting
to the sun's more open flowing.

Now departs delicious sweet dream
yet lingers still profound delight
lays me down against this lapping
quiet water's weaving light.

Pewter tinted stars devoured
by the cream that slithers in
whispering open up with listening
hark the softly growing din.
===========================


gawwwd I love when you rhyme!!!!!
this is pure harmony of imagery and meter and read aloud like the poetic heaven you painted with your words.


Now for me some words come easy
But I know that they don't mean that much
Compared with the things that are said when lovers touch

Jackson Browne

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11 posted 04-23-2002 10:38 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Martie........I thought my poetry was ....

I am wrong...   your's is awesome.....

Love this one...
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12 posted 04-23-2002 11:03 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

All I can say is thank you.  Well, and fantastic too

~* Sharon *~

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((( MARTIE ))), oh my goodness this poem is exquisite...
Muaah on cheekz DearPoetFriend...
*~coco~*
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14 posted 04-25-2002 10:28 AM       View Profile for suthern   Email suthern   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for suthern

Pewter tinted stars devoured
by the cream that slithers in

It simply doesn't get better than this. *S* An inviting title leads to such a delightful read... this is absolutely lovely.
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'Pewter tinted stars devoured
by the cream that slithers in
whispering open up with listening
hark the softly growing din.'

I've never quite heard things described in the way that you do, Martie...incredible rhymes and images...

sp        

I've been down this road forever,
and the time has come to circle back home...

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you have such a wonderful way with words Martie, just lovely.  *s*

Like a red brick,
in a white wall
somebodies brush
forgot to paint...
lonely....(as sung by Tracy Lawrence..)

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Martie, there is such treasure given to us from your golden mind. I really like this.
Great imagery, your trademark. ThisDiamond
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As evidenced by the plethora of benevolant replies,
you have unearthed a poetic treasure,
your mind is the grizzled miner

and we are the beneficiaries of your wealth of words.

~high Fives to a cool buddy!~
jeff
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Such majestic phrasing!!  You are a treat to read.  KJ

Through rubble and trouble and dark of night
The yawn of a dawn will hasten the light

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20 posted 06-22-2004 05:24 PM       View Profile for Dark Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Angel

Indeed you are a treat to read Martie, I can't believe I missed this, I thought I had read all of your amazing poetry.

"hugs:

Maree

The clouds never expect it when it rains, but the sea, changes colour, but the sea, does not change.
~Stevie Nicks~

 
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