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painting a lazy dream of deep languish...
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painting a lazy dream of deep languish... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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all that i had asked was a little touch of kindness and all you did was give me a stare and a cruel smile is it not true that a cold look is all you have for me when all that i needed you to do is stretch out your arm take a good look and see how i have been trodden over and how my ship sways anchorless on this vast wavy sea is it not true that i am your object of ridicule while all that i needed was to have you as a close friend oh! how you love to drag me down to smell dirt off the ground and then you love to step on me, step on me, step on me now i have gotten up and dusted your scent off my skin and hid my feelings in the place where the trees touched the ground is it not true that the darkest spots are where the roots scorch while all that they do is dig deep in their search for water it is for that fresh drink of truth that i thirst at this time yet i stay here painting a lazy dream of deep languish is it not true that dreams of you were high up in the sky while all i had to do was breathe as the sea streamed past me oh! how you loved to drag me down to smell dirt off the ground and then you loved to step on me, step on me, step on me ! [This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (04-23-2002 03:03 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SudhirMyFriend~ I really could feel the depth of emotion in this piece. Excellent emote~ 'now i have gotten up and dusted your scent off my skin and hid my feelings in the place where the trees touched the ground' And this is the perfect creative thought of poetic writing ... AWESOME~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, A sad but beautiful write. I enjoyed the read. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Sudhir, very powerful and extremely sad emotions written here my friend. Very well done! Be well. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I see the rising of this character my friend. . . you give him much depth. . . excellent. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
thanks a lot for all your words of extreme uplift... regards to all, Sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wonderfully done! Yes! I have felt the same way! Love the way you wrote this emotion! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"it is for that fresh drink of truth that i thirst at this time yet i stay here painting a lazy dream of deep languish is it not true that dreams of you were high up in the sky while all i had to do was breathe as the sea streamed past me"  (big hugggssssss) This is so very sadly written, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I hope now you have been tapped on the shoulder with a caress of kindness and you have found love that is compassionate and can feel for your golden heart! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh how I know this feeling. You wrote this so well, and I hope whomever it is stops stepping on your heart. Sandra |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
WOW what a poem. Don't know if it's for real, but if it is, you should let the one read it, that would set her back for a moment. And if not, you could have fooled me with those strong emotions rising up. Do I make any sense? Sometimes it's hard to express in English what I feel inside.  and a big  to you my friend.Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you all so very much... and yes Titia, your words always make sense... Regards to all of you, Sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
filled with sorrow, hope all is well now |
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