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Sudhir Iyer
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0 posted 04-23-2002 12:04 PM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

all that i had asked was a little touch of kindness
and all you did was give me a stare and a cruel smile
is it not true that a cold look is all you have for me
when all that i needed you to do is stretch out your arm

take a good look and see how i have been trodden over
and how my ship sways anchorless on this vast wavy sea
is it not true that i am your object of ridicule
while all that i needed was to have you as a close friend

oh! how you love to drag me down to smell dirt off the ground
and then you love to step on me, step on me, step on me

now i have gotten up and dusted your scent off my skin
and hid my feelings in the place where the trees touched the ground
is it not true that the darkest spots are where the roots scorch
while all that they do is dig deep in their search for water

it is for that fresh drink of truth that i thirst at this time
yet i stay here painting a lazy dream of deep languish
is it not true that dreams of you were high up in the sky
while all i had to do was breathe as the sea streamed past me

oh! how you loved to drag me down to smell dirt off the ground
and then you loved to step on me, step on me, step on me

!

[This message has been edited by Sudhir Iyer (04-23-2002 03:03 PM).]

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1 posted 04-23-2002 12:33 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

SudhirMyFriend~
I really could feel the depth of emotion in this piece.
Excellent emote~

'now i have gotten up and dusted your scent off my skin
and hid my feelings in the place where the trees touched the ground'


And this is the perfect creative thought of poetic writing ... AWESOME~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 04-23-2002 12:38 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Sudhir,
A sad but beautiful write. I enjoyed the read.
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3 posted 04-23-2002 01:40 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Sudhir, very powerful and extremely sad emotions written here my friend.
Very well done!  Be well.
~Hugs~

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dancing with you in the summer rain~

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4 posted 04-23-2002 04:38 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sven

I see the rising of this character my friend. . . you give him much depth. . .

excellent. . .

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Sudhir Iyer
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5 posted 04-24-2002 04:47 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

thanks a lot for all your words of extreme uplift...

regards to all,
Sudhir
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wonderfully done! Yes! I have felt the same way! Love the way you wrote this emotion!
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7 posted 04-28-2002 04:30 PM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel

"it is for that fresh drink of truth that i thirst at this time
yet i stay here painting a lazy dream of deep languish
is it not true that dreams of you were high up in the sky
while all i had to do was breathe as the sea streamed past me"




(big hugggssssss) This is so very sadly written, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I hope now you have been tapped on the shoulder with a caress of kindness and you have found love that is compassionate and can feel for your golden heart! (sigh) This is powerful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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Oh how I know this feeling. You wrote this so well, and I hope whomever it is stops stepping on your heart.
Sandra
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9 posted 04-28-2002 09:36 PM       View Profile for Titia Geertman   Email Titia Geertman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Titia Geertman's Home Page   View IP for Titia Geertman

WOW what a poem.
Don't know if it's for real, but if it is, you should let the one read it, that would set her back for a moment.
And if not, you could have fooled me with those strong emotions rising up.

Do I make any sense? Sometimes it's hard to express in English what I feel inside.

and a big to you my friend.

Titia

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Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

Sudhir Iyer
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10 posted 06-19-2002 05:57 AM       View Profile for Sudhir Iyer   Email Sudhir Iyer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Sudhir Iyer

Thank you all so very much... and yes Titia, your words always make sense...


Regards to all of you,
Sudhir
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11 posted 12-31-2002 02:19 AM       View Profile for passing shadows   Email passing shadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for passing shadows

filled with sorrow, hope all is well now
 
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