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Sven
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0 posted 04-22-2002 03:11 PM       View Profile for Sven   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Sven


I
like
the way
that my hand
moves through its flow
watching it spin and twist
with the leaves and the dust
becoming a part of that tornadic eddy
captured in minature style along the city sidewalk
as the sun betrays time by deigning to shine
on a day when clouds should be seen
and when nature should be asleep
it becomes a part of me
and I flow with it
spinning around in time
until I am
one with
the
sky

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

[This message has been edited by Sven (04-22-2002 03:13 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 John Garcia - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 04-22-2002 03:32 PM       View Profile for Marsha   Email Marsha   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marsha's Home Page   View IP for Marsha

Sven darling boy oh this is sooooooo good. Truly outstanding, as always, you are such a fine poet. I love the way youve written this, its utterly superb, the flow is divine all the way through. This really is an excellent piece darling heart you have excelled yourself. The feelings reach from within the page, you have written this sooooooo very well

Wonderful writing utterly wonderful


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

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2 posted 04-22-2002 03:41 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

Now you went and did it....Threw a curve
at us....

Imagine that!!  And the shape of the poem,
like that miniature tornado...

Nicely done,  Sir Sven...
devina
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3 posted 04-22-2002 05:42 PM       View Profile for devina   Email devina   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for devina

Love your format here John...just made your words jump out at me!! (hey-watch my eye MR!)
Bigs hugs to you my dear friend!!!

~D

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...


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4 posted 04-22-2002 05:50 PM       View Profile for Temptress   Email Temptress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Temptress

Its a joy to watch your work grow, John. This one really took me in.

*Jenn*

How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

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5 posted 04-22-2002 08:40 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Love this Sven!
Very creative....
so pleased I didn't miss this one!
~Hugs~


  

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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6 posted 04-22-2002 09:32 PM       View Profile for Bill Charles   Email Bill Charles   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bill Charles

Sven - my friend, you are one with the sky, your writings magnificent, as they always are. Nice to see you my friend...

BC
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7 posted 04-22-2002 09:49 PM       View Profile for catalinamoon   Email catalinamoon   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit catalinamoon's Home Page   View IP for catalinamoon

Really enjoyed this one.
Write on..
Sandra
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I like it, too!  Glad to see your creativity is flowing again!
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How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

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Clever spin on this...quite unique Sven...I love the windblown effect--

a nice surprise. Yanno? This reminded me of being a kid, and holding my hand outside the car window, testing the force...

yep! I've always been this way!

Nice Job with this one. Enjoyed much.   
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Very clever! This is creativity at it's best!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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Ah and I remember your writing and find it a true pleasure to be reading again.

** Long time, no read ** Glad I am back and browsing.
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Sven~

you do that you know, come in and sweep us all off our feet with words and form....Good morning poet friend...


Lauren~

~Sinking fast into
a ocean of you,
what if told you,
what if I said
that I love you
do we dare cross
that line between your
heart and mine~

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Hey, I like this, Sven. This is nice.
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in case anyone's wondering. . .the title means "hand in wind". . .

Marsha, thank you as always love. . . good to hear from you. . .

Magnus, hey, I like to keep you guys on your toes. . . lol. . . thank you Sir. . .

Devina, I have one word for you. . . BOO!!  lol  thank you. . .

Temptress, thank you. . . it's nice to have people around to help me in that growth. . . and thanks for the extra read. . .

Enchantress, thank you. . . I'm glad that you didn't miss it either. . .

BC, I'm afraid I have a long way to go to make the sky my friend. . . but, for now, I'll be happy to be here with all of you. . . thanks. . .

Sandra, thanks. . . I'm right behind you. . .

serenity, you hit the nail right on the head. . . you can always see exactly what I'm saying. . . thank you. . .

Melissa, there's always room for new ideas. . .hope that I was able to give you a few. . . thanks. . .

KimW, it's nice to see you again. . . you've been away for a long time, yes. . . thank you for enjoying. . .

Lauren, sweep you off your feet??     well, maybe. . . I just like to think that I take you on a whirlwind trip inside my mind. . . thank you my friend. . .

SmartChick, hey. . . thank you very much!!  glad that you enjoyed. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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I like that too!
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john,

excellent form and presentation...but
i truly expect no less from you! as always
you are a master of words and i am in
awe...you leave me tonight with a smile
and i thank you! hope you are doing well.
have missed you!
take care.
amy

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the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do"

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(smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I just love the form in this wonderful poem, I am so happy I found this! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fantastic! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet John, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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Oh GR8 Voice of the Northlands, this is soooo gooooooooooooood!
Are you right handed?
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passing shadows, glad that you like it as well. . .  

Amy, keep that up, and I'm going to need to die of embarassment!!   thank you my friend. . . I've missed you as well. . .

Noah, I just can't hide from you can I my friend??     thank you so much. . .

Interloper, am I right-handed??  well, let me put it this way, Oh Great Voice of the Southland. . . every once in a while. . .   lol

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

[This message has been edited by Sven (04-29-2002 03:02 PM).]

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Sven,
I love the sight and the write to me it's a sheer delight.
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Risky -- and good for that risk.
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I like this very much, Sven. *S* Excellent presentation... the right align was unexpected but visually powerful. *S*
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Sy, thank you my friend. . . glad that you enjoyed. . .

bsquirrel, thank you. . . I like to take risks. . . makes for good poetry. . . thank you for agreeing. . .

suthern, thank you. . . I was toying whether or not to go with the right align, but knew that the poem would be missing something. . . thank you. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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