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VAS
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2002-04-22 12:33 PM



To Seek Living Water

Trickles sang in my ears
as the warm sand caressed my every step,
the pain eating at my heart,
tearing at my stomach,
had already begun to ease.

Wings fluttered,
a raven was leaving;
finches and sparrows,
sparrows! were alighting
in the willow branches
dangling gently in the breeze.

I placed my hand
upon the stone
lowered myself
onto the sand,
gentle ripples lapped at my toes
and knees.

I knelt there,
the living in the water
coaxed me to renewal;
assured me
life was here.

I spoke,
silently,
from my heart,
from my soul-
then listened.

Quiet,
save for gentle chatter,
of bird song,
chortling above me,
a hum of bumble
droned a calming.

All was a tender whisper
speaking love, loving me,
with heartening.

A freshening of tears
caressed my cheeks,
a trickling of living water
sang my cares, fears
away.

A prayer of the spirit
from groanings
deep within me,
words I did not understand,
inaudible, yet they released
pain and anguish.

As agony’s mute lifted,
sparrow’s song
reached the very core of me,
finch’s chirping bubbled
my spirit to effervescence.

I could rise again,
I stepped into the stream,
felt a call to enter fully
into the blessings awaiting.

The cool water rushed
around me as my submerging
spun it about.
As I reached
complete immersion,
the cool, cleansing power
brought life to my thinking.

Rising
from the stream,
pain and fear
dripped completely away,
flowed downstream.

Stepping from the water,
I found even the sand
felt more solid,
more grounded, as did I.

©April 22, 2002


Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

[This message has been edited by VAS (04-22-2002 05:23 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 Virginia Salter - All Rights Reserved
catalinamoon
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
1 posted 2002-04-22 10:02 PM


I like it as is, and I think it has a very powerful feeling.
Sandra

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353
Michigan, USA
2 posted 2002-04-22 10:41 PM


Magnificent!
If this is a work in the works, I shall read you on the billboards! There is something about the healing power of nature that is amazing and you have touched on a subject that I can embrace completely. Thank you for sharing this with us. ThisDiamond

Larry C
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Member Patricius
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286
United States
3 posted 2002-04-22 11:51 PM


Okay Virginia,
Was this a trick question? I can't find where it could be improved! Excellent metaphor so well developed and presented. I can't begin to write like this. Nice job.

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

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