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catalinamoon
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The Shores of Alone

0 posted 2002-04-22 12:06 PM


She dreams of living in a world
wrapped in belong and growing free,
a touch of delicate the best
a vineyard, where she wants to be.

It should be California warm
though Burgundy would do as well
She wants to watch love grow and thrive,
the winery holds magic spells.

These vines her metaphor of life
they must be nurtured or they die
with love, a special gentle touch
and just enough of rain tears cry.

She dreams and sees the future thus
but does the vintner understand?
Therein the flaw of perfect dream
for after all, he's just a man...

© Copyright 2002 Sandra - All Rights Reserved
Victoria
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1 posted 2002-04-22 12:18 PM


Very tender and lovely sandra..a sad one ..hugss..

                 ~Victoria

Honeybee
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2 posted 2002-04-22 12:26 PM



Sadly powerful and beautiful this is.  You use this theme to perfection...and, it's a keeper I'd say that this is one of your best!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

VAS
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3 posted 2002-04-22 12:35 PM


that last stanza is especially captivating!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Ceinwyn
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4 posted 2002-04-22 01:37 PM


Spellbinding!!
Krawdad
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5 posted 2002-04-22 01:55 PM


Nicely done and I'll echo the comments above.
Duncan
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6 posted 2002-04-22 02:14 PM


Love the use of wine and a vineyard as metaphor.  One of your best, I think, Sandra.
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7 posted 2002-04-22 02:55 PM


as you are only who you are my friend. . .

well done. . . love this image. . .

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JamesMichael
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8 posted 2002-04-22 03:27 PM


"They must be nurtured or they die"...yes we must...James
ctowen
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9 posted 2002-04-22 04:35 PM


Even the owner of such a vineyard has dreams .... each day is a new vine, each bend a new path taken. Its only in our dreams that we see what we expect as the straight and narrow .... only as we would want them to be.

Your wine sounds bitter and heavy but your heart still holds true spirit.
An excellent piece of thought you have shared.  TY

[This message has been edited by ctowen (04-22-2002 04:37 PM).]

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10 posted 2002-04-22 04:50 PM


Sandra....this is vintage at it's finest.

Yes....only a man....just as YOU...only a
woman....both making their share of mistakes.
May your vines prosper and the wine of your
life flow freely....

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11 posted 2002-04-22 04:56 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Sandra, this is so very sad yet so beautiful, I too hope that now the vines have flowere deep in her heart and she has again felt this special love just as you deserve so very much! (sigh) This is so very powerfully said, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sandra, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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12 posted 2002-04-22 05:01 PM


"She dreams and sees the future thus
but does the vintner understand?
Therein the flaw of perfect dream
for after all, he's just a man..."

So true, that a man will usually not understand a woman's dreams. But yet, don't women often rely very heavily on men to make them come true. And place their bets on hope?

Maybe women need to be active engineers of their own winery, take firm charge and run her own vineyards to make that wine come out perfect. Just let the man do some digging and pruning. Quit depending on magical abilities men may not have, or even know about? Just a thought.

((Sandra))
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Copyright: 2002 Newell Elsworth Usher

devina
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13 posted 2002-04-22 05:53 PM


Loved the whole feel of this...I say dive right in and don't look back or wait for proposal...

~D

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



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14 posted 2002-04-22 07:40 PM


Sandra,
Ouch! It seems to me...you're too young to give up. I thought good wine took time. Ya' need a new vintner. Excellent metaphor and challenging conclusion.

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

Enchantress
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15 posted 2002-04-22 08:26 PM


She dreams and sees the future thus
but does the vintner understand?
Therein the flaw of perfect dream
for after all, he's just a man...
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Beautiful Sandra!
Has to be one of, if not your best!
Enjoyed so much.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Bill Charles
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highways, & byways, for now
16 posted 2002-04-22 09:39 PM


Sandra - loved reading this one. Excellent one it is, sad but beautiful...

BC

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