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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2002-04-22 07:55 AM


They were both young beneath the late spring sky,
Walking hills and fields as cirrus clouds fly,
They traveled alone to explore the new,
She dressed in white and he was wearing blue.

The fence was wrapped with blackberry vines,
Laden with ripe fruits awaiting their find
To pick and eat the sweetness hanging there,
But thorny berries need picking with care.

He gathered a handful giving her them
Then returned and got a handful for him,
She smiled for him at the delightful taste
He gathered another handful in haste.

For his pricked fingers she gave him a kiss,
Her juice stained lips didn’t need to insist.

Gloom
A Challenge met, No Sad elements


© Copyright 2002 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
Larry C
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1 posted 2002-04-22 11:09 AM


PG,
And I hope you meet this challenge more often! I really like this piece. Excellent and some fond memories besides.

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

Zinsser
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Calif.
2 posted 2002-04-22 12:34 PM


Oh.... soooo very beautiful.. I could see it and smell it and almost taist the fingers she kissed  LOL a bit a berry juice on them  : )
Loved this
~~ Connie ~~

Professor Gloom
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3 posted 2002-04-22 01:41 PM


Thank you, Larry C,
Glad you enjoy it, this was actually harder for me
Than the sorrow – gloomy poems that are more my nature,
But it is based on an actual event of my childhood.

Thank you, Zinsser,
You are kind in your praise
I am pleased I could aid you in the visualization.

Gloom

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2002-04-22 10:12 PM


For his pricked fingers she gave him a kiss,
Her juice stained lips didn’t need to insist.

Sometimes you surprise me...

M

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2002-04-22 10:12 PM


smiling here---love the blackberries...they were/are quite fruitful this year! A delicious poem...and? It made me wanna back that blackberry cobbler!
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