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Widow's Walk.........collaberation with Kit McCallum

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               The Widow’s Walk


The port was bustling by the bay, where fishing boats were docked,
Another journey loomed ahead, as sailors laughed and talked;
An organized confusion reigned, as vessels were prepared,
While wives and children lined the pier to show how much they cared.

With cargo safely ‘neath the hold, where nets and lines were stored,
The Captain made his final call … “It’s time to come aboard!”
The fog was softly rolling in, as tension filled the air,
A mist clung to the gentle breeze, as senses came aware.


The newlyweds clung to each other in the salty air,
He wore a look of kind indulgence – she, one of despair;
Only married for a week, she held her husband tight,
Unwilling to release him to the silence of the night.

He smiled and gently touched the cheek of his new, loving wife,
Reminding her these were the pitfalls of a sailor’s life.
There was no need to be afraid for he would be home soon,
And, when he did, then they would have a real honeymoon.


She saw the look of promise in her husband’s loving eyes,
And heard his tender whispers as he comforted her cries;
Her warm embrace was broken by the Captain’s final roar,
Then watched her love climb up the plank, while she remained on shore.

The ropes that anchored her to him, were loosened from their grip,
She caught his eye and waved to him as he waved from the ship …
She raced along the dock and blew him kisses as she flew,
Until the distance swallowed him into the ocean’s view.


The ship was taking goods to France – three months to there and back,
Quite vulnerable to ocean storms and enemy attack;
So many things to worry her and muddle up her mind,
The voyages were just as hard for loved ones left behind.

The weeks went by when she began, each night, to climb the stair,
And spend time on the Widow’s Walk, that was constructed there.
Hair whipping wildly in the wind, she strolled out for a sight,
Of anything that could have been a fishing vessel’s light.


She scanned the vast horizon, off and on as days went by,
Anticipating his return … a twinkle in her eye;
The doctor had confirmed what she suspected for a while …
She rubbed her belly … “Soon” … she prayed, and gave a little smile.

She gazed across the ocean and she heaved a heavy sigh,
“It won’t be long,” she whispered, for three months had passed her by.
She paced along the Widow’s Walk, expecting she would see,
A sign that he was coming home to their new family.


Another week had passed her by – another week – then more …
Along the Widow Walk, her steps rang out on hardwood floor.
There’d been no news of her man’s ship – nobody knew a thing,
The town wives waited fearfully for news each day could bring.

She fought the rising of her fears with every breath she took,
Each night she strolled out to the sea, and tried her best to look,
And see a glimmer of a spark illuminating night,
A signal that her man was safe and they would be all right.


The child within her slowly grew, with every passing day,
Reminding her the length of time that he had been away;
His ship was six months overdue the night his son was born,
Her joy was laced with sorrow, as she cried into the morn.

In weakened state, she gathered up her son and held him tight,
Then traced her route toward the Widow’s Walk in early light;
She stood upon the weathered boards and clutched her newborn son,
Then walked the path she knew so well until the night was done.


*~*     *~*    *~*

So that’s the way my life began, those 30 years ago,
What happened to my father? I guess we will never know.
Mom trod the Widow’s Walk each night, for 20 years or more,
Until at last, God’s angels came a-knocking at her door.

I have a small son of my own to brighten up my day,
We’ve lived in this same house since Momma gently passed away.
The sailing ships go out no longer like they did back then,
And Widow’s Walks are just a symbol of life way back when.

On windy nights when strong winds blow, the boards creak pretty bad …
At times my son gets startled, and he cries out “What’s that, dad?”
I smile and say “Don’t worry, son,” and take him by the hand,
And say … “That’s Grandma, Widow Walking, waiting for her man.”



/Balladeer and Kit McCallum\


© Copyright 2002 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 04-21-2002 09:13 PM       View Profile for SmartChick   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit SmartChick's Home Page   View IP for SmartChick

This is a wonderful story. I thoroughly enjoyed reding it.
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2 posted 04-21-2002 09:14 PM       View Profile for Krawdad   Email Krawdad   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Krawdad

Enjoyed, Enjoyed !
Fun read, you two !
You are both naturals at this !
Do some more !
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Does this have a familiar ring or what!?  I love it...and I know Lady in White will love it just as much!  A grand story, a wonderful poem...a most delightful collaboration!
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4 posted 04-21-2002 09:43 PM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

What an excellent and thrilling duet for you both. This is one of the best I have read, and portrays of talents illustrious. ThisDiamond
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5 posted 04-21-2002 09:58 PM       View Profile for Poet deVine   Email Poet deVine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet deVine

This is a masterpiece. But I have a question.. is it easier to write when you're sitting right next to each other? Thank you so much for sharing this....
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6 posted 04-21-2002 10:27 PM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Kit and Balladeer!
This is a masterpiece!
You'll never know just how much I enjoyed this!

*Is it easier to write on a stomach full of lobster?*

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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’Deer and Kit, this is wonderful, but then how could it be anything else? Two masters of poetic form and rhyme combined to make a great poem an absolutely wonderful poem. I just had to check on PIP’s before I went, and I’m so glad I did, I get to answer before mum, again Mama you’re slacking darling mummy. Well, she isn’t but I wouldn’t let her on here until I’ve gone. Good night all you wonderful poets write some more this is splendid.

This is a really wonderful collaboration, absolutely perfect writing xxx I really wish I could collaborate with someone Mum won’t she say’s writing with me is bad for her nerves.  


Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

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at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

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WOW!!! Oh my gosh, this is such a wonderful duet, sweet friends, I too dream of writing a duet with one of you or another poet here sometime sitting next to each other live! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, you two always bring such magic to the boards, we all love you so much! You have such beautiful hearts, sweet Kit and Balladeer, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton
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I do believe that this is the best poem
collaborated by two shining poets that has
graced the pages of PiP....

Bar none!!!

Superb, outstanding, awesome.....and more!!!
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I will have to ditto, Barry...absolutely incedible you two!
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11 posted 04-22-2002 01:31 AM       View Profile for Balladeer   Email Balladeer   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Balladeer's Home Page   View IP for Balladeer

smartchick..we're glad you enjoyed!!

krawdad...thank you! Yes, our poetry does feel natural to us and I'm sure we'll do more. Thanks for reading...

Sunshine..I've just been advised it IS remindful. Great minds must run alike! Thank you, shining one!

Diamond lady..thank you for your kind words...glad you liked it!

DeVine one...good question! I found it easier..Kit found it a little more difficult. It's nice having the immediate response and approval of the other in person and yet it can put one "under the gun", so to speak, to produce. In either case, it was  lot of fun...

Enchantress.....MUCH easier!! Especially when accompanied with clam chowder and stuffed quahogs! The poetry just flows!!!

Krissy...LOL! Writing with you is bad for her nerves? Does that mean you intimidate her?? I'm sure you two could come up with a beaut!! Thanks, sweet Krissy, for your kindness!

Noah,,,thank you, friend. I'm sure you will do that one day and it will be great...

Magnus...we appreciate your applause VERY much! Writing with Kit is so easy...just wind her up and watch her go...she's awesome! Thank you for enjoying our offering, sir..

Duncan...glad you like it, good sir. I'm sure you and Tracy could come up with real gems...how about it?
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’Deer dearest heart and Kit darling girl, this is, in the words of my abominable daughter, perfect writing. As always the meter flow and rhyme are perfect, the story so touching I had tears in my heart. YOU both match your verses so perfectly that truly you cannot see the join. Utterly utterly perfect writing, and of course I love it utterly

Krissy beloved daughter of mine, yes extremely bad for my nerves No, ‘Deer she doesn’t intimidate me, she steals all the best lines, and writes at a different pace. Writing with her is sheer torture, she places words with such exquisite care, where I simply write, she doesn’t, she says she creates. Krissy darling heart, are you surprised I won’t write with you? Mmmm?

I absolutely love this wonderful perfect duet, always your works shine, together it becomes incandescent Absolutely excellent writing


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

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You two are the king and queen of cadence and story telling in rhyme. Loved the theme and imagery in this.
Very cool you two and thanks for sharing part of your trip with us
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You two write in poetic harmony, and hearing you read together was a wonderful experience.
What a beautiful poem. It will stay in my memory.
THank you
Liz
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Kit~ Balladeer~

What a treasure you have created, a fun read...a keeper.... I know you guys are having lots of fun, and it shows....what a special time for you all....


Lauren~


~Sinking fast into
a ocean of you,
what if told you,
what if I said
that I love you
do we dare cross
that line between your
heart and mine~

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (04-22-2002 09:49 AM).]

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Kit and Deer,

You two this is just an awesome write!
I loved reading this, and felt myself
going faster and faster to find out what
would happen next. You two sure do have a
way with suspense, and a wonderful gift
of writing, combined you are unstoppable!

Take care.
Amy

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the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do"

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I expected magnificence from the moment I saw the authors' names... but you exceeded my expectations. *S* If anyone needed proof that you two are poetic royalty, there shouldn't be even a scintilla of doubt remaining. *G* From first word to last, this is perfection... 'cept you didn't provide hankies. *G* Wonderful!
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Kit and 'Deer ~

This is a wonderful and touching story, when you two get together, you write gold!   

Hey Michael! ~ Nice new pic. See, I told you that you were a cutie patootie

Take care,
Melissa~

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it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

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Kit, 'Deer...Sunshine is right...I like this very much.  You two work together so very well at poetry, that it doesn't seem like work at all, more of a gift to the rest of us from two fine minds...
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Thank you for the kind words and encouragement everyone ... you are all very much appreciated.

This was such a treat for me to write with Michael in person. To see him in action is a treasure. We wrote this out on a couple of pieces of paper before typing it out ... and my parts were a scribbly crossed out mess, while Michael's looked like perfection from the first stroke of his pen to the last, lol. He is exceptional ... no doubt about it.

Thank you Michael ...

Much appreciation and big hugs to all,
/Kit
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Amazing!! Loved this. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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I love to read your stories and now Kit is taking part
I think you did a swell job, it was written very smart
The tale about the widow walk, you'll find it also here
Even in the modern times there is this sense of fear

one for Balladeer and one for Kit

Titia

Oops, forgot: nice pic Deer



A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Check out my new website: lookheretitia.fcpages.com (I didn't 'link' this, so it won't take too much space).I

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Kit & Balladeer~
Well ... I cried through the first two readings ... so had to come back for a third read ... still got a tiny-teary-trickle this time ...
~
Beautifully done you two !
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~

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24 posted 04-23-2002 09:41 PM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Well you both know how I felt about this poem as I saw you read it, and heard it "live".  I cried, but then I suppose that was what I had to do because you just couldn't let him come home could you?  Oh no, not you two.  By the way have I told you lately how incredible the two of you are?  Well if not, I am telling you now and p.s. I miss you

~* Sharon *~

 
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