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Temptress
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0 posted 2002-04-21 12:20 PM


It took no money to walk on the beach for a while
standing in hell dressed like our own personal heaven.
Its a wonder I'm not cold by now
for all the sin I've watched
but I'm still here somewhere
holding on to the inside of you.
I'm your other you
the one you turned your back on
for nights under fresh stars with fresh destruction.
Drinks on tap just like your soul
you stood dressed no more in innocence than
the very first time you put me here
and its
empty
except for the cold way you need to finally be something else.
You only think of me when you need warmth
when you need something to believe in.
We both know this isn't the kind of life you want to revel in
but we've had second helpings of selfishness
and its one hell of a plate, baby.
This is your heart
and I need to tell you to take one last longing look
before I slam the door on all you once believed in with me
but I can't
because
I'm
*c*h*o*k*i*n*g* on the strength I'm suppose to have for you.
Maybe you've come home late one too many times.
Time for me to face what you haven't done.
This is your heart
and I haven't slammed the door yet
but I don't think I can save you this time.


How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2002-04-21 12:30 PM


Its a wonder I'm not cold by now
for all the sin I've watched

but I'm still here somewhere
holding on to the inside of you.
I'm your other you
the one you turned your back on
for nights under fresh stars with fresh destruction.
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damn girlie...this is one heck of a purge...
all I can do is shake my head...I understand all too well this kind of personal honesty when we look at ourselves this way...
the things we carry with us...the things we are drawn to...the things we hurt ourselves on time and time again...
yes...my worst enemy is usually me.
powerful, poignant, poetry here Jenn...
a moth anthem me thinks.

how about how good it feels to finally forgive you
   ~~~
the moment I jumped off of it ... was the moment I touched down.

~Alanis Morissette~

Larry C
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2 posted 2002-04-21 01:27 PM


Jenn,
One more time...just one more time. Trust me it will be a good investment! Incredible write.

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

Mistletoe Angel
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3 posted 2002-04-21 04:09 PM




BRAVO!!! Oh Jenn, this is indeed so very powerful, I too think that in many cases we can always be our own worst enemies and life is all about a battle in winning the respect and admiration of ourselves, and being engaged from here on in! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love your views on human emotions always, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jenn, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Honeybee
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4 posted 2002-04-21 04:25 PM



Jen, you've really outdone yourself here, it's a powerful fiery write!

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Sven
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5 posted 2002-04-22 03:41 PM


to be ourself. . . or is it ourselves???

excellent. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Temptress
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6 posted 2002-04-23 07:54 PM


Jenn -this is great Its a reality poem when you know the story LOL- Runvus
Moonlight Romeo
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The heart of you
7 posted 2002-04-24 01:34 PM


Speaking in the other of yourself is the only reality.

Thank you.

What light through yon window breaks?  It is the east, and Juliet is the sun.

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