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Madame Chipmunk
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Emptiness



Wind
   blowing in circles
      picking up speed
         circling fast
             spiraling hard
                 ever higher
                     twisting
                       turning the air
                             ever faster
creating a vacuum
      danger
         emptiness
            a void
               in the center
                  taking flight
                     across the skies
touching down
    sucking up
       everything
           in it's path
              creating destruction
a void
     emptiness



Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

[This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (04-20-2002 10:11 PM).]

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Interesting form and a window on what huricanes and tornados do. Well done!



[This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-20-2002 10:13 PM).]

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Yes, I agree with ecrivan. Nice graphic to accompany the poem. Good work Lyra, and be well.

~sky

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Lyra,
good visual work but it sounds like you are caught up in something bigger than your ability to cope with. I hope all gets better.
Keth

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Your poetry is never empty dear Lyra, but I've got to be honest, this on scares me a little bit and makes me worry about you!  You ok???
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Well,I hope you didn't just have a tornado.(we had an earthquake today!) And that everything else is going ok.
Well done write, Lyra
Sandra
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Lyra,
Excellent presentation. But I'll pass on the tornado and you should too! As for your life...hopefully all is calm.

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

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Lyra darling girl as always your writing portrays such depth and understanding of the power of nature in our world. This is absolutely a magnificent piece from you, the power and the presence of it are amazing. Truly outstanding writing. The graphic is utterly awesome

Take care of you darling heart, Love you xxxxx

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


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(big hugggsssssss) Oh Lyra, I can feel a double-edged sword feeling in this poem, sweet friend, I hope everything is alright and this poem is nothing more than the natural force of weather and its cause and effects! (sigh) My heart goes out to many who are victimized by these natursl disasters, sweet friend, this is powerfully written, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lyra, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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madame chipmunk,

Your presentation is
very effective, as is
the picture,
this is great writing.
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Very well described Lyra.....I rode out
Hurricane Hugo in 1989....experienced the
emptiness of the eye when it went over us.
Very eerie feeling....from 130 miles per
hour to zero and back to 130 in about 90
minutes....from two different directions..

Love your description for the tornado...and
nice pic...
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Well done Lyra.  Very visual description...and rather eerie too,
what with living here in tornado alley.  
Do hope your own life is settling down a bit.
~Love, Hugs, and Prayers, Nancy~
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Lyra, sweet Lady of strength,
its OK to be scared.  Fear is a dark vacuum, but holding the hand
of others, we can join together with a braveness.  ~huuuug~
i knew instantly what you were referring to,
and those feelings that can chill a soul.

a classicaly written poem, where it takes all of the lines
to be cohesive as a singular feeling, and done mega-well!
jeff
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Yikes!! Hold tight to those ruby slippers!! Well done Lyra. hugs, Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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True story:  a few years ago, there was a bad hurricane down south of me, pinpoint Wichita Kansas on a map and go a big East.  A friend of ours had taken roses to his wife for their anniversary.  He placed the glass vase on the table, plunked the roses in, turned on the news, heard the sirens, grabbed spouse and kids and headed for the basement.

When they came back up, the walls of the house were gone.

The roses, in the crystal vase on the table, remained untouched.
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wow..what a picture and also one in my mind from your  words..and Sunshine..loved the story *s


hugss Lyra

keep warm
M
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Hey Lyra, I like this. This is wonderful.
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Thanks Martin,
I tried to capture the essence of a tornado with the format of the script also, but I don't think anyone caught that.
~lots of hugs

Lyra

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Thanks so much for your reply, Sky
~hugs of appreciation

Lyra

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Thanks Keth,  I appreciate your reply, but the poem really is about a tornado...there are no hidden emotional innuendos here...
~swirling hugs

Lyra

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Thanks Lori,  I can't say I'm perfectly okay, I have some really annoying side effects from the radiation treatments...but they are temporary.....I only have 7 more treatments left...but this poem really is about a tornado.
Thanks so much for your concern
~loving hugs

Lyra

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Thanks Sandra...You must live on the east coast.
I hope that you didn't get too much damage from the hurricane.
We didn't just have a tornado, but we do have them here quite often.
They are truly evil storms
~stormy hugs

Lyra

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Thanks Larry...I'll pass on the tornado too....they are frightening.
~scary hugs

Lyra

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Thanks so much, Marsha...
I love you too!  Your pink words are a boost to my self esteem.
~loving hugs

Lyra

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Thanks for your reply, dear Noah....
Please don't worry, the poem is really ONLY about a tornado.
~lots of hugs

Lyra

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