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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-04-20 02:04 AM


Scalpel for a metaphor--
writing surgery--
a finger-tipped confessor--
poetry, my priest.


Slash-and-burn this field of heart.
Appease the ancient gods with word.
I need to script myself apart--
I pray in silence I'll be heard.


Sacrifice the saboteur,
defining definition.
Save me from myself, absurd,
absolve me of volition.


Still the screaming left undone
lest in my sleep I shatter night.
Every thought is smoking gun
of spirit's suicide.


Let loose the poisons from my vein;
and yes, pour salt upon the wound.
"Holy, Holy," in refrain
beneath a hallowed moon.


I pray release my misery.
I beg, deliver me, from me.
A penning of epiphany--
a poem be my peace.





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Larry C
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1 posted 2002-04-20 02:19 AM


Karen,
And peace it should bring. Well done!

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

Duncan
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2 posted 2002-04-20 02:30 AM


You two make me proud (well, almost) to be...
a moth
a flame
a nut magnet
a friend.

Wonder if ya have a clue how great and timely a write this is?

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2002-04-20 12:02 PM


Rhymed Weep ... Poetic Promised Keep
(Gifted Pen of Sen)

Whispered sorrow passed down thru borrowed time,
scripture and verse etched in metered rhyme.
Promised peace circling in silent release,
captivated by gifted pen's fragile caprice.

A wish is cast cross summer's starlit sky ...
a cry from the past in fervored sigh.
Woman-child dances beneath solstice moon,
a goddess in chains of innocence taken too soon.

How is it then ... I taste the salt of her tears?
Twins born apart ... reunited in rhymed reflecting mirrors.
If I've but one wish ... it would be to give her my eyes,
to grant her my view ... her true beauty in resonating realize.

I beg of the muses at night to pen for her in chapter and verse,
that I might write a lullaby to free her from this sleepless curse.
In the end, 'tis her own pen that will compose that venial symphony,
her veins bleed of need that will keep her promised poetic epiphany.

~*~






~*~

"people see me
I'm a challenge
to your balance
I'm over your heads
how I confound you
and astound you
to know I must be one of the wonders
of god's own creation
and as far as you can see you can offer me
no explanation


I believe
fate smiled and destiny
laughed as she came to my cradle
"know this child will be able"
laughed as my body she lifted
"know this child will be gifted
with love, with patience
and with faith
she'll make her way"


Wonder
Natalie Merchant

~*~



Your pen will be your key baby ...
Love you KA.






how about how good it feels to finally forgive you
   ~~~
the moment I jumped off of it ... was the moment I touched down.

~Alanis Morissette~

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (04-20-2002 02:33 PM).]

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2002-04-20 12:24 PM


Thank you Larry! It's much appreciated.

Duncan? I'm not sure, but you may be the first male member of U.M. (United Moth)
You my friend, crack me up. Hugs.

Janet--I don't know where to begin. I often wonder if people realize the impact they can have just by being there. You have touched so many lives here are passions, and I'm lucky to be one of them. I will treasure your response always...(tho it makes me blush) I love you m'twin. Thanks for being there, yet once again.

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-04-20 04:06 PM


where else could I be me twin...
and hey...yer beautiful when ya blush...
*wink*
thank you for the poetic peace...
hugs baby
mothyme

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6 posted 2002-04-20 07:20 PM




BRAVO!!! This is indeed a very poignant piece, sweet friend, I am so happy you are back and with a vengeance of poetic beauty! (smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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7 posted 2002-04-20 07:31 PM


They're my peace too...

~sky

I'm in charge, and I say question authority!

Martie
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8 posted 2002-04-20 08:56 PM


Your words touch me, Karen..in the place that understands this, I hear you loud and clear.  
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9 posted 2002-04-20 10:38 PM


Yeah, exactly!
Sandra

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10 posted 2002-04-20 10:50 PM


~There, what you've both written, wow, just, so, real and reaching, so wonderful to read, to watch from way over here the two of you and this,...*Peace girls.

and I love the 'wonder' lyrics,...

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2002-04-21 01:24 AM


sweet noah...thank you for your reply, but mostly for being so steadfastly and uniquely you. You have a beautiful heart noah. And we do all love you.

Martie...I know you know this feeling, this was ONE OF THOSE that was like pulling teeth. I forget who said it, but I believe it was a painter, "It's either very very easy, or very, very hard." I know you know.
Thank you.

Sandra..? ditto the above, lady!

sky...ditto that twice!

and Alicia...glad that you enjoyed the lovefest...grin, and yes, I loved the Natalie Merchant quote too. Thank you as well.


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12 posted 2002-05-01 01:57 PM


Makes me think of Emily Dickinson.
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13 posted 2002-05-01 11:40 PM


I sure have missed your creative  heart! This one is cool beyond words.
serenity blaze
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14 posted 2002-05-02 04:15 AM


thank you...mike? I don't know how...but I'll try to just type thanks...
Janet Marie
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15 posted 2004-06-13 02:11 PM


see reply #3  
Janet Marie
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16 posted 2005-06-13 01:46 AM



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17 posted 2005-06-13 02:11 PM


Let loose the poisons from my vein;
and yes, pour salt upon the wound.
"Holy, Holy," in refrain
beneath a hallowed moon.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
How is it then ... I taste the salt of her tears?
Twins born apart ... reunited in rhymed reflecting mirrors.
If I've but one wish ... it would be to give her my eyes,
to grant her my view ... her true beauty in resonating realize.

I beg of the muses at night to pen for her in chapter and verse,
that I might write a lullaby to free her from this sleepless curse.
In the end, 'tis her own pen that will compose that venial symphony,
her veins bleed of need that will keep her promised poetic epiphany.

Your pen will be your key baby ...
Love you KA.

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Yanno, I read this poem and the responses for the first time today, and got all teary-eyed.

A pen will truly always be your release and savior K, but having this woman to walk tall with don't hurt a dang thing either that is for sure.

I salute you both, my Gemini ladies, from one more of the "G-girlies" - and a very Happy Birthday Karen.


            

You both are so loved.
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