The Coming (modified ending)

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Open Poetry #20

The Coming (modified ending)

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

0 posted 2002-04-19 09:20 AM

Collections of friends you have not seen
early start of Spring that has never been;
bicycled paths down memory lanes
wreaths of joy on window panes.

Knocks on doors and rings on phones
taps on counters and pets with bones;
lights greet youngsters at party sessions
candlewax drips on gangster's obsessions.

Man with a lamb and accompanied beasts
invited to lunch and subsequent feasts,
goblets of red poured at the entrances
pieces of bread torn on the premises.

Collecions of people and places, where have you been?
recollections of time and traces, what have you seen?
families of flags attached to stands of tin
entities of man latched onto anchors in winds.

[This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-19-2002 09:39 AM).]

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

1 posted 2002-04-19 11:29 AM

I like this a lot, ecrivan.

~sky

I'm in charge, and I say question authority!

Opeth
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since 2001-12-13

Posts 1543
The Ravines

2 posted 2002-04-19 11:46 AM

"Collecions of people and places, where have you been?
recollections of time and traces, what have you seen?
families of flags attached to stands of tin
entities of man latched onto anchors in winds."

- this i enjoyed, that last stanza was cool.

Greeneyes

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since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

3 posted 2002-04-19 12:48 PM

Martin~

I am enjoying reaing your views....this is very thought provoking...well done...

Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows of my heart

ecrivan
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since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

4 posted 2002-04-20 12:24 PM

Sky,

glad you like my style..have been thinking about some never ending peace inititiatives, that spurned this.

JC.

thanks for sharing your thoughts.

Lauren,

thought provoking yes..actually think my writes are becoming more illustrative as time progresses and the imagery more dynamic.

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