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Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

0 posted 2002-04-19 03:23 AM

a heart in edit
(Serenity suggested to someone else, it fit, I borrowed)

Too many words
too many voices on this cloud
thoughts, emotions getting out of hand
I need to take a drive
into a starless night
no destination
ragtop down
radio loud with distortion
of bass, speed and alcohol
I need to have some illusion of control
if only for the night
I need to give my heart time
to edit
been making it up as I go along
speaking too quickly, far too long
I’m more than lost
I’m in love
with uncertainty
when all I want to do is drive
and sing along
to songs
that already know me

Sunnyone
Member Ascendant

since 2000-07-06

Posts 5334
Staffordshire, England

1 posted 2002-04-19 06:21 AM

yes, and I, too, love to sing along to songs that already know me!!  What a great line, what a great poem!!!!!
The music is playing...it's your time to dance!

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

2 posted 2002-04-19 07:00 AM

I need to take a drive
into a starless night
no destination
ragtop down
radio loud with distortion
of bass, speed and alcohol
I need to have some illusion of control
if only for the night
I need to give my heart time
to edit
==================================

some say its the journey ...not the destination...
some say it the parking place you end up with *S*
Some say its all the same...love "drives" us crazy. *L*
The confusion and longing in your words touch me D ... I have missed reading your view from the porch.
So...got your tunes?...your map?
Compass? You do know which way is North right?

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-04-19 07:03 AM

LOL...what JM said...I do love the last few lines, especially about the songs knowing us...well done Duncan...thank you for this one!

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2002-04-19 09:07 AM

G'mornin' sweets!

and oh my, but this is wistful and full of longing for the unknown. Lots of great lines in this one that I wouldn't mind borrowing myself...hmmmm...

It's like a cameo of your soul (<--another one?) heh heh...

Beautifully written dunc.

(oh yeah, and great job with this, it's not easy to type with your finger in your mouth! bwahahaha...

)

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

5 posted 2002-04-19 11:27 AM

I need to have some illusion of control
if only for the night
I need to give my heart time
to edit
been making it up as I go along
speaking too quickly, far too long

I really like this, Duncan... the introspection and lack of direction are a powerful duo. *S* And I love the thought of songs knowing you... well done! *S*

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

6 posted 2002-04-19 11:50 AM

Pack the cooler dude... we'll take a road trip and see what it is the empty lanes edit out of our hearts...and what we can drown in old tunes or good whiskey...

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

7 posted 2002-04-19 03:03 PM

Isn't it great that we can edit things in our lives. Great thoughts here Duncan

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

8 posted 2002-04-19 04:50 PM

I’m more than lost
I’m in love
with uncertainty
when all I want to do is drive
and sing along
to songs
that already know me
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Duncan, you do know this is a way cool write I hope!?
Well it sure is and I just love it!
Good stuff!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-04-19 07:57 PM

(sigh) Uncertainty is something I know all too well, and while I am always curious in marking it down to learning, I always love to sing along and enjoy the ride and will continue to do so! (big hugggssssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Honeybee
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

10 posted 2002-04-19 08:48 PM

I'm gonna jump on the Janet Marie bandwagon, her replies are always perfect!
Duncan, this is such a cool write

And thanks to Karen for the inspiration~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

J. K. Mitchell
Member

since 2002-01-12

Posts 311
GA

11 posted 2002-04-19 10:27 PM

Bravo! Bravo! I understand
needing just a few moments to rebalance your life after love hits.

"The only love there is, is the love we make."--Prince

Krawdad
Member Elite

since 2001-01-03

Posts 2597

12 posted 2002-04-19 10:34 PM

Ah, yes . . . the night drive to nowhere
Well put.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

13 posted 2002-04-19 11:33 PM

Duncan...I had no idea you could drive and
write so well at one time....this is good...

Larry C

Member Patricius

since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

14 posted 2002-04-20 01:54 AM

Duncan,
Okay...pull over. I told you don't drink and drive. But don't you dare stop writing! Way cool write.

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

15 posted 2002-04-20 03:49 PM

"I’m in love
with uncertainty
when all I want to do is drive
and sing along
to songs
that already know me"
That is a great line! Just keep it down on the alcohol when you're out on the road, 'cuz we don't want to hear you singing 'Jail House Rock.'

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

16 posted 2002-04-20 05:55 PM

Duncan, just let me grab my jacket and I'll go for that ride with ya!! Love this, Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Bill Charles
Member Patricius

since 2000-07-11

Posts 10619
highways, & byways, for now

17 posted 2002-04-20 06:08 PM

Duncan - I'd love to join you on this ride into the night, just feeling the breeze, listening to music, forgetting...

BC

Ivy Rose
Senior Member

since 2001-12-29

Posts 1300
MA, USA

18 posted 2002-04-20 06:25 PM

BRILLIANT POEM!!! Duncan, this is gorgeous. A heart in edit, indeed. ***Ivy Rose

rosepetals25

Member Elite

since 2000-05-31

Posts 3076
PA

19 posted 2002-04-20 09:44 PM

Duncan,

I love the ending, it was perfect. I really liked

Hugs,
Tara

"My heart is like an open book, for the whole world to read"
- Motley Crue, Home Sweet Home

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

20 posted 2002-04-20 10:34 PM

Duncan, I feel like I could be in the seat next to you. Feeling the wind in my hair and the confusion in my heart.
Sandra

A Whisper's Caress
Senior Member

since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

21 posted 2002-04-21 10:31 AM

Duncan,

It has been a long time, or so it seems. Absolutely phenominal write. The last verse packs quite a punch. May I use it in my signature line? With credit to you, of course.

ever deep...runs
the wishing well
for fairytale illusions

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