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See (he) Saw
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See (he) Saw |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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(Now he knows.) He saw me. (Time for me to go...) the callouses upon my feet cushioning the miles I tred with droplets of the blood I bled. I grabbed fig leaf. I donned the garb that I called "me." The only thing I could call home... uncertainty (the echo roams) Now I'll be alone... See him go... [This message has been edited by serenity (04-18-2002 05:14 AM).] |
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skyshine 
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
*sigh* I know, I know...How the heck can we get them to stay?!??  I'm in charge, and I say question authority! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Clever one indeed my sis!! I loved the "echo" of this one- no doubt the truth!!! Missed you too much!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SEEerenSAWity~ Enjoyed the ups and downs of this one~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
If he doesn't like you as you REALLY are? Let him go, he's not worth it. Because the real you is wonderful!  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
See, if you hadn't been gone so long...it wouldn't have taken me so long to get this. Now here you are and the light bulb's exploded! This is exactly what I'm afraid of. (Sure hope I remember reading it in the morning...lol.) |
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Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Vini Vici er.. or something like that.. he came, he saw, he's an idiot. anytways, fine poetry as always. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
that beauty is a beast-- the callouses upon my feet cushioning the miles I tred with droplets of the blood I bled. ===================================== Not a beast...just too much woman for mortal man  heart-hugs me twin mothyme how about how good it feels to finally forgive you |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
So are you saying he saw more than you are comfortable with...and thus wanted again to hide... ( chuckling) clever write my friend.. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Always listen to your heart and always accept what makes you feel happy and comfortable, sweet friend, this is powerfully expressive and I hope you now hold love that can feel for you! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Serenity girl this is simply outstanding writing, you have done so well here I don’t know how you do it. Again flawless and perfectly presented. What can I say but this is exceptional. YOU always write brilliantly and today is no exception. Wonderful flow and rhythm this is fabulous Truly darling girl this is awesome   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
he went there to the edge of the room to lock the door and get a chair to come back and spend hours seeing you that way enjoyed the view of the words |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Came back to say thanks--I appreciate your comments much! And I'd love to stick around, but I'm afraid I had bit too much whiskey last night. OW. Now pardon me while I go shave the fuzz off of my tongue.  |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the simplicity of this betrays the all too well-known thoughts. . . have I mentioned that it's good to see you back?? ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You've just renewed my faith in masks. *S* Seriously, serenity... this one touches me deeply... Shave that tongue carefully for we need your voice. *S* |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Sehr kuhl. |
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