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0 posted 2002-04-17 01:31 PM




Underneath my smile
Underneath my style
Hidden from your view
Known to just a few
Lurks a presence dark
One that leaves its mark
Taunting me for years
Snickering at my tears
Spoiling trips and fun
Halting plans before begun
Creeping up on me it's play
Trying to ruin my day
Panic is it's name
Breaking spirits is it's game.
But my spirit shouts, "Enough!"
"It's time to show your stuff"
"Passions is your second home"
"Write your feelings in a poem"
"The poets will help you fight"
"For they honour love and light."
So that is what I'll do
Borrow strength from all of you.
Panic holds the losing card -
Passions soldiers are on guard.

                                    Nightshade
                                       Apr. 2002



© Copyright 2002 Chris Barker - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-17 01:38 PM


We Gotcha covered girlie...
Set those demons free ... your pen is your voice.
I understand this darkness...and youre right...in the light...its not so scary.
Youre not alone.
hugs brave poetess.

how about how good it feels to finally forgive you
   ~~~
the moment I jumped off of it ... was the moment I touched down.

~Alanis Morissette~

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2 posted 2002-04-17 01:45 PM


JanetMarie - oh thankyou for responding. I thought possibly others might think "she's really lost it." No, just trying to find it again...my inner-strength that is. Hugs!

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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3 posted 2002-04-17 01:47 PM


Thou shalt be spared the pain
of thy frantic ways and woes
For this Knight shall be again
in guard of thee, on my toes.

Excellent write Chris....I have been there.
Know that feeling that can make things very
difficult for self and others as well.  

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4 posted 2002-04-17 01:53 PM


Magnus - dear poet, your kind words are welcomed more than you know to-day. Thankyou.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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5 posted 2002-04-17 01:53 PM


Chris

You are not alone in these feelings, at all..and giving them word lessons their impact, that much I know.  You have witten a poem of strength.

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6 posted 2002-04-17 01:56 PM


Martie - sweet one, thankyou so much.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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7 posted 2002-04-17 02:10 PM


Nicely written Chris.. I envy people who are not panic stricken by anything..how lucky they are..hugss

           ~Victoria

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8 posted 2002-04-17 02:12 PM


Victoria - oh, you and me both. I used to be that way....once upon a time. But, hey, things could be worse and as my sister Enchantress always tells me, "to-morrow is another day." Thankyou.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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BRAVO!!! YAY!!! Oh my gosh, this is wonderful, sweet friend, yes, yes, always write it out, for we will always be so happy to be the second family to your heart and we will always be here for you to comfort you! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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10 posted 2002-04-17 03:44 PM


Noah - thankyou as always for your sweet comments.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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11 posted 2002-04-17 03:56 PM


Amazing, there is hope when we fall prey to darkness, and this is a good place to release your pain and feelings and it's so amazing that noone judges us!!! *hugs*

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12 posted 2002-04-17 04:03 PM


Chris, oh sweet sister...
YOU GO GIRL!
It is a fight, I know for I have been there...
there is a light at the end of that tunnel remember?
This is a wonderful write and I'm proud of you for exploring this
on the pages of blue.  Write it out Chris...keep writing it out!
Love ya, Teed.

*please check your email for news of someone from your past*


~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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13 posted 2002-04-17 04:08 PM


Ceinwyn - thankyou so much.

Enchantress - Teed, what can I say? What a blessing it is to have you for my sister. You have always been there with a light in the window for me. Love you!!

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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14 posted 2002-04-17 05:30 PM


Chris..I think that is one of the most thought out poems I have ever read..the experiences you cover appear to have passed through my life at one time or another..awesome my dear friend ..awesome..
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15 posted 2002-04-17 05:44 PM



Panic
Anxiety
Sadness
Sorrow
Inanity
Obsessions
Neuroses [and]
Silliness

all found within the blue walls...

and a lot of other GOOD stuff, too!

Thanks for wanting to be here!

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16 posted 2002-04-17 06:41 PM


gladiator - how nice of you to comment Gib..thankyou!

Sunshine - that was awesome! Thanks.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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17 posted 2002-04-18 05:42 PM


Milady shall I draw my sword and drive off this dragon that vexes you so? One word from you and it will become my holy quest.

paladin

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18 posted 2002-04-18 05:55 PM


The truth will set you free...James
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19 posted 2002-04-18 06:02 PM


Chris~

what an insightful write.....I enjoyed this much.... HUGSSS


Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows of my heart

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20 posted 2002-04-18 07:00 PM


Nightshade - I love the way you've written this with your feelings. I can almost live within what you've written. I find it does help to write out ones thoughts, and then post them. They have a tendency to not hurt as much. I wish you well. And keep writing...

BC

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21 posted 2002-04-18 07:35 PM


paladin - kind sir, thou words maketh me blush! Thankyou.

James - freedom!! I'd shout it from the rooftops. Thanks.

Lauren - thankyou for stopping by.

Bill - thanks once again for your kind words.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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22 posted 2002-04-18 07:55 PM


Excellent!

"The only love there is, is the love we make."--Prince

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23 posted 2002-04-18 08:38 PM


J.K. - thankyou so much

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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24 posted 2002-04-19 09:24 AM


I understand so very well... and applaud the beautiful way you've written those feelings. *S*
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25 posted 2002-04-19 09:39 AM


Command me ... I am but a soldier to serve your needs

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26 posted 2002-04-19 09:45 AM


suthern - thankyou for commenting, I appreciate it.

Interloper - thankyou kind poet, your words have eased my fears more than once.

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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