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SmittenKitten
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where the sky and horizon meet

0 posted 2002-04-16 07:55 PM


Thought Excavation

A blank page waits.
Soon it will be filled with words -
from thoughts that I've kept hidden away
in cobwebbed recesses.
I am forging them to the front now,
digging them out painstakingly
through each layer.
Memories linger in the dank air
and slow my progress,
making me want to turn back
and give up on this painful operation.
But the page waits, as do you
and so I prod on.
I near the front, and look back
on the path that I have cleared.

I know now what I must write.

I would rather tramp through
the tenebrous alcoves
of my mind
than write those words.
All of them leading to the one word
that I would hide away forever -
Goodbye.

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.  
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

© Copyright 2002 Krista C. - All Rights Reserved
skyshine
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1 posted 2002-04-16 07:59 PM


Goodbyes are difficult for me as well....sometimes it's so difficult to know what to do. Well done.

~sky

I'm in charge, and I say question authority!

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2 posted 2002-04-16 08:27 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Krista, this is so very sad, sweet friend, I know how hard it must fell goodbye and I pray this no longer applies to you and now you are greeted each day with true joy! (kiss on cheek) You deserve the greatest happiness of all, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Krista, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Janet Marie
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3 posted 2002-04-16 10:14 PM


I would rather tramp through
the tenebrous alcoves
of my mind
than write those words.
All of them leading to the one word
that I would hide away forever -
Goodbye.

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Wonderful vocabulary and phrasing in this Krista...we must let the muse take us where it shall.
This is a bittersweet beauty...clever title and word play...and the ending is poetically perfect.
Well done poetess

Enchantress
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4 posted 2002-04-16 10:42 PM


I would rather tramp through
the tenebrous alcoves
of my mind
than write those words.
All of them leading to the one word
that I would hide away forever -
Goodbye.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Krista, this is achingly beautiful!
I am so pleased I didn't miss this gem!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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5 posted 2002-04-17 08:27 AM


such a strong ending...and a beautifully sad write... glad you shared it with us again!

Seymour Tabin
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6 posted 2002-04-17 09:11 AM


SmittenKitten
A clever and bittersweet write, enjoyed.

Marge Tindal
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7 posted 2002-04-17 09:48 AM


SmittenKitten~
Very, very nicely penned~
*applause*
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
         noles1@totcon.com                    

SmittenKitten
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where the sky and horizon meet
8 posted 2002-04-17 05:18 PM



SkyShine~ Yeah, goodbyes just plain stink =)  Thanks for stopping in!
P.S. I love your signature!  It's hilarious!

SweetNoah~ Well I faced a goodbye recently so I dug this poem up for poetic release.  Thank you caring

JM~ Your replies always leave me soaring in the clouds =) Thank you sweet poetess, I hope someday to be as good a poet as you!
You got the captain to bring out lambe, what will it take to get a poem or two from you hmm?

Nancy~ Thank you so much for stopping in, I'm glad you didn't miss it either because you brought me a smile   *hugs back*

Cat Hair~ Thank you for peeking in =)  I love your work so much so I'm always ecstatic to hear from you!

Seymour~ You honour me sir, thank you.

Marge~ Aww, thanks so much sweet poetess *hugs back*

Hugs to all of you!

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.  
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

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