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Cpat Hair
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0 posted 2002-04-16 04:48 PM


I didn’t know her
But she smiled and ordered me a drink
Then turned to talk to a friend
While glancing my way as if to include me
In the conversation she was having
Or perhaps wanting me to know
The things she said.

Her words told of a struggle
With a soon to be Ex if only
The settlement could be reached
And she could get on with her life

With a giggle
She looked again at me and leaned over
To speak to me, letting the top
Of her blouse gap open and reveal
Creamy tops of breast held in a white lace

I smiled as best I could while trying to keep my eyes
In appropriate places as she slid over next to me
And told the waitress to set up another round

We drank and chatted for a while
And then the evening ended

But not before I was touched
By her attention


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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2002-04-16 04:53 PM


Magnificant writing...reminds me of my friend Jesse...everytime we hang out together it seems like he meets another woman...a new love interest...don't hang out with him as much anymore because I have a girlfriend and I find that I am not looking for another...James
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2 posted 2002-04-16 04:53 PM



Sometimes the best touch is the one with the eyes...good job here...I liked the tone, I liked watching...

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3 posted 2002-04-16 05:11 PM


Enjoyed this Ron...felt as though I was sitting right there watching...
and it left me with smiling eyes...
yes, feels good to have ones ego flirted with.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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4 posted 2002-04-16 05:13 PM


yes, you tend to put the reader "there" and that is very cool...great write
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5 posted 2002-04-16 05:53 PM


James: Appreciate your comments my friend. Unlike your friend I rarely meet a woman that pays that much attention to me. Perhaps that is why this was written

Sunshine: Yes sometimes that is the best touch

Enchantress: glad I could work a bit of magic on the words to take you there

SEA: Thank you my friend... nice of you to say...


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6 posted 2002-04-16 07:04 PM


But not before I was touched
By her attention
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love the possiblities of that line....
this made me think of Iambe...
must I BEG for her to get some attention. *L*

very cool write Capt.

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7 posted 2002-04-16 07:05 PM


Feel good moments..I enjoyed this so. You deserve them..even the peek of lace! Wink*~
I must catch up with your wonderful verse.

Sincerely,
Regina

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8 posted 2002-04-16 07:30 PM


Oh, I enjoyed this! Could almost hear the ice cubes clinking in the patrons glasses. Well done. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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9 posted 2002-04-16 07:41 PM



Cat Hair~ A tender touching moment...I love the last two lines ~ they speak of a soft and quiet gratitude.  

*hugs*
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.  
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

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10 posted 2002-04-16 08:20 PM


Very nicely captured!  Made me smile.  A blossom in an untended garden.  
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11 posted 2002-04-16 09:09 PM




(smiles) This is wonderful, sweet friend, your wonderful words always make me smile and capture every moment! (big huggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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12 posted 2002-04-16 09:12 PM


Ron

I like this intimate look into the place where you are...it is real and makes me want to give you a hug.  

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13 posted 2002-04-16 09:47 PM


CPatHair~
I'm a 'flirt' ... so the title grabbed me~
I found it a poignantly appreciative read~
*HUGS*
~*Marge*~

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14 posted 2002-04-16 09:54 PM


I love flirting almost as much as being flirted with...great, as you said, for the ego.  The last few poems I've read from you have definetly become favorites.
And like JM, wouldn't mind a visit to see lambe myself.  Wanna pick up JM and make it a road trip?

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16 posted 2002-04-17 10:44 AM


I feel I was invited to share a private moment... you definitely put the reader THERE. *S* This leaves me with smiles, Cpat... I like it very much. *S*
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17 posted 2002-04-17 04:17 PM


ah yes. . . this is a moment that is almost universal. . . but yet, is wholly yours. . .

well done my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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