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The Ark
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The Ark |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The Ark Tender embers burn within By the churn of our primal sin Who’ll touch a spark within the dark? Who’ll save the lives within this ark? Set tinder and relight again The dying green within the glen Smoke hovers a dusty gray Blocking out our futures lay Casting shadows ghostly maul Misdirecting echoes call. Teardrops like an impulse wave Water down the fires grave Blacken rims each circles brim Smothering the slim to grim Watch each dying ember out One by one each tear and doubt. Falling in the abyss of night Imploded by a sun to bright. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Tender embers burn within By the churn of our primal sin Who'll touch a spark within the dark? Who'll save the lives within this ark? ====================================== Casting shadows ghostly maul Misdirecting echoes call. Teardrops like an impulse wave Water down the fires grave Blacken rims each circles brim Smothering the slim to grim Watch each dying ember out One by one each tear and doubt. Falling in the abyss of night Imploded by a sun to bright. =================================  Sy-babers...this poem is so darn cool... I just LOVE this poem's whole conceive. I love the dark, haunted perspective you wrote this in...with the undercurrent of emotion that read like a plea. (Made me think of the scene in Titanic, when the people in the lifeboats are helplessly watching the ship sink)See how much impact the words can have? And the imagery is so impressive. Very very cool me Stinkylove.    |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, Thank you my love, wait for me in the garden and we will have some tea and talk. WWRS Kiss: |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling boy this is of course utterly utterly excellent. YES it is, and don’t argue you have such an amazing ability to write in the heart of a soul. It’s as if you can actually etch into the heart of the reader. Utterly utterly perfect writing. It is an absolutely beautiful example of your incredible skill. I love it utterly Wonderful writing and so beautifully penned from a poetic angels pen dipped in poets thought ink. You do know I love this utterly utterly   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I'm already there Stinky...no place Id rather be.  So whatchya wanna talk about? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, I love your subtlety, LOL JM, Something I wrote for you awhile back. All this and more She is to me a sphere of joy A delight and mischievous toy A wonderland of word and feel An endless stream of love and zeal. The dreams she sell and would expel, Fills my heart like a wishing well. I drink her with a thirsty need And hold her with a miser's greed. She has the softness of a fawn. The freshness of a bright new dawn. The mystery of a starry night. The pleasures of the mornings light. And though we stand upon a stage With all the substance of our age I never could a truer friend And pray it never, never end. Our friendship is a Camelot, So tax me not, a thank you plot. WWRS |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Stinky...you spoil me... and I'm the one who should be thanking you!!!! I dont care where we go... Eden, Shangri-La, Camelot..where ever Randy's wings and your mind divine takes us... dont ya know by now...Id follow you anywhere *L**winkiewinkie* thank you Sybabes...I love the poem... and the poet |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jm, Thank you for your reply and just being there. WWRS. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 WOW!!! I too got the same vision Janet got reading this too of the luxury liner sinking, this poem has fabulous imagery and its voice speaks out at so many levels! (big hugggsssss) May you find all your heart desires and may ther boat rise like a phoenix to the sky, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (04-15-2002 03:13 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
There is so much I want to say...and my heart says thank you |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah my friend thank you. Sunshine, Love you too. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I am late...sigh, sy!!!! Not much more I can add, but I have some strange ideas about arks, and this suited me perfectly! You are a doll, and I have missed you! |
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Silver Streak Member Elite
since 2002-01-02
Posts 3625FL, USA |
Terrific, Seymour! ((Seymour)) -newell Sharing God's Love through perfectlovepoetry.com |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Serenity, Missed you too, "squeeze: Newell, Thanks for the terrific. |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Water down the fires grave" Sy~ This late at night, my mind has glossed over the meaning, but my eyes and ears greedily took in the images and your flowing rhyme. I love how this reads. *hugs* ~Krista Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Krista, A sweet reply and I thank you. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Blacken rims each circles brim Smothering the slim to grim Watch each dying ember out One by one each tear and doubt. I like that a lot!! I was reminded not too long ago that the ark was man-made while the Titanic was built by professionals. Interestig concept huh? Thanks for this~ |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Sy, this is such a haunting, powerful and imagery laced emote. I can't even begin to tell you how well this reads and how hard it hits the eyes and heart. Stop being so darn cool for a while will ya? Might I say that IWIHWT!  You've blessed me with another keeper~ Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Looking forward to meeting the man behind these incredible words and his better half |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
BluesSerenade Your words warm me to the core. Melissa, The blessing is mine by your keep. Hoot, I'm afraid you will meet a very shy man. |
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