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Magnus
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0 posted 2002-04-11 06:57 PM


As globe of love falls from clearest of sky
into the land beyond the sight of eye
Mine heart entwines thy own upon the green
of grasses mown before the shimmer’s glean.

At touch of glove by hand of shy
Across thy land I heard thy cry
Two hearts in wind, long journey’s dream
As wet grassed prints imagined scene

‘Pon break of new day in yon forest stand
whence be fair maiden of the greatest land
Stirring in thy bed of soft silken white
in yearn of strong and most fearless dark knight

To wake, to wake upon the morning grand
and hear thy call of heart’s command
Throw back thy sheets of silk delight
To hurry this day back to dark Knight

Wilt not thy moist lips find mine own in pass
as dew of vine does fill our wine of glass
Chance thee not rise to softest of my knock
Thy door shall darken ‘gain at toll of clock

Hurry dear Sire to this your lass
On knees I begged all during Mass
What? grasping noise at door’s great lock
Cling to thy lady in blue-green smock


[This message has been edited by Magnus (04-11-2002 07:25 PM).]

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Krissy
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1 posted 2002-04-11 07:23 PM


Magnus Hi there again, this is a wonderful piece of writing, it flows with such a lovely soft flow. Could this be any smoother? I don’t think so, excellent writing. Well done


Love and warm stuff
As always
Krissy

And while thy willing soul transpiers
at every pore with instant fires
Andrew Marvell 1621-1678

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2 posted 2002-04-11 07:32 PM


Barry~

What a muse, very lovely my friend, as you always take us to the edge of passion....leaving us wanting more....


Lauren~

Step through the
barrier of my mind,
enter my soul,
feel my desire,
let my eyes guide you
into the shadows of my heart

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3 posted 2002-04-11 08:18 PM




BRAVO!!! Yes, I too felt that this was so very smooth and spoken in silver, sweet friend, I envisioned a Baroque and Renaissance classic feel reading this! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is wonderful! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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4 posted 2002-04-11 10:40 PM


Ah Barry....it ended too soon!
Just as I was really involved in the story...
a knock at the door?!
Enjoyed, Hugs.

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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5 posted 2002-04-11 10:54 PM


Magnus...I love the medieval tone to this poem.  I can see and hear the Knights, the fair maidens, answering to the heart's call.
CLASSIC POEM, BEAUTIFULLY PORTRAYED!!!

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6 posted 2002-04-11 11:02 PM



Sounds like the beginning of a serial, Magnus...perhaps your Muse will indulge you a little more...

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