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I Just Can't Write a Villanelle!.....for Nan's Workshop
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I Just Can't Write a Villanelle!.....for Nan's Workshop |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA 
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I'm living in poetic hell! It matters not how hard I try I just can't write a villanelle! I thought that I could do quite well Since I am such a clever guy... I'm living in poetic hell! I sit imprisoned in this cell My paper blank - my inkwell dry I just can't write a villanelle! Frustration makes my fingers swell As do my eyes from tears I cry.. I'm living in poetic hell! The words inside my head won't gel The way they should...don't ask me why! I just can't write a villanelle! Oh, God, release me from the spell Of how this form can mystify.. I'm living in poetic hell! I just can't write a villanelle! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  YAY!!! Ahhhhhh, but you just have! (big hugggsssss) I just love the sense of humor and irony you put into your words, sweet friend, sometimes when we try so hard and would go at any lengths, we are suprised by the magic we can come up with! (smiles) This is a most excellent villanelle, sweet friend, we all love you so much, this is yet another ode from your golden quill! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yeah...right. Show us some more...please? |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Balladeer, Cute enjoyed the read. Thanks for posting. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
’Deer hi there, okay so what was that then? Tell me how do you write a villanelle. Verses of three lines each that rhyme? The first and last line of the first verse becomes the last line in the alternating verses? Until the last verse where they become the last two lines? Have I got that right? As always whatever you write this is something rather special, I like this I really do. And I get to answer before mum, now that always is an added bonus. You may say it’s not whom answers first that matters, but it does to us There’s a certain kudos in it you see. And it’s fun to play tag on the forum. Mum I got here before you, and I’m going to try a villanelle, if I have the recipe right? Have I? Wonderful writing ‘Deer it really is wonderful   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
well, you can call it what you will but your words have always been poetic heaven to me... nice job, Michael!!! sounds like purgatory can't hold you... as long as your pen has ink! i tried to write one myself, but i couldn't styx with it. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nice try on the bluff!! Sure....you can't write one....yeah...Right! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Looks like you did a pretty good job to me! Cor |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Um... Don't look now, but... You just wrote a VILLANELLE..! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
If Nan said you did, then you did. She rules!....and you rock!!! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Agreement with Nan.... It sure gels like a villanelle great job on the villanelle you couldn't write, Michael  ~rhyming hugs~ copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Well Balladeer, it looks like you have done this really good. I just love to read all that you write. |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
You aren't kidding anyone you can write anything you want..btw i just read what you said about an Edsil..i remember those too haa..remember how you could change the radio with your foot on the floor ha..yes big back seats ha  ~Victoria |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Noah....hehe..can't fool you! Thank you, my friend. Sunshine...here? in public?  Sy...and thank you for gandering! Krissy...thank you, lady! Have mum walk you over to the poetry workshop forum where Nan spells out a brilliant definition of villanelles....piece of cake for you, I'm sure! Doreen...couldn't Styx with it? LOL! VERY GOOD! You can tickle the Hell right out of me Magnus...maybe that's why I always lose at poker? LOL! I thank you, sir.. Corinne...if you like it, that's good enough for me! Nan...I didn't MEAN to!!!!!!! Martie....and you roll!  Madame C...thankee, lady! I can't write a sonnet, either. I'll try one soon.... |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
smartchick...thank you, sweet lady. I love for you to read me... Victoria....yes! I remember that! What a car! There were Winnebagos with less room than the good ole Edsel! And those wings! Truly an American classic!!!  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You had me scared for a moment, Deer One... I read your first line and thought "ye gads... he's opened one of my poems!" LOL I enjoyed this much... "can't" should never be part of your poetic vocabulary. *S* |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
’Deer dearest heart Mmmm? As if is there anything you cannot do? I think the answer to that is No there isn’t anything that you cannot do. Now I definitely cannot do a villanelle, and even Nan’s masterly definition and Masterclass in villanelles hasn’t helped. This as always is truly fabulous writing, your lines are so beautifully constructed. Do I love this you know? I do it’s utterly utterly perfect. As for you Krissy my darling daughter, crow all you like darling I am still technically ahead on points Villanelle or no villanelle Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Showoff!!  |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Ahem! I'll second that 'showoff!' Hmpf!  your wit and writing ability rules as always!Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... it is a song that rises from a bleeding wound...or a smiling mouth" ~Kahlil Gibran~ [This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (04-13-2002 06:32 PM).] |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
*Bump* |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Show us what else you cannot do. Please? |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I could teach you I could coach you all about the Villanelle my Deer But they will wonder And they will ponder if in my head I was unwell bit queer just teasing you my Dear For this here Villanelle You did write it so well A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Gosh durnit, this should have 50 replies by now! I'm gonna bump the dickens out of this UNTIL we all appreciate Deer's talent "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
’Deer Melissa is right there should be a multiplicity of replies by now, and why there isn’t I can’t tell, so I’ll bump it too. Besides it’s a brilliant and perfect example of HOW to write a villanelle, and no I’m not writing another, I only did that one because I was showing mum I was prepared to have a go. She likes being challenged, it keeps her happy So Bumpity bump to the top you go Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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