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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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At 16 the heat from skin steamed up windows as we in back seat gathering of clothes and modesty wished in earnest for something deeper I turned from your fingers opening buttons and made a heart on window your initials and mine entwined curled lip of letters feeling like my need to be wrapped in you Even then I knew there was more than this heavy breathing the essence of warped mirror fogged reflection felt inside the epidermal thought I yearned for you past the soft slide of seduction on leather seat to a place far beyond the touch of skin on skin or lust on lust for then and still to relate as epiphanic cousins Those nights at 16 we dream still of timid intimate knowing and the turns of the coast highway remind me in the bold way the cliff falls and distributes rocks into the crashing ocean of the way we felt standing over our awakening your thigh against mine and the sea endless and sure connects us like forever ------- Thanks, River! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Martie, Martie.... now why did you want to go and paint that picture? Now I have to spend the afternoon remembering not the coastal highway, but the hill country of Missouri and an old 56 Chevy 4 door that had a wonderful back seat... Dang it... and I needed to be working... I'm thinking you did this to torture us and are part of an evil plot to destroy the efficency of the American workplace by placing such distracting thoughts in our heads.. ( chuckling) Seriously... very nice work! |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
Yes i think spring is in the air ha..from one coast to another ha..nicely penned Martie  ~Victoria |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I turned from your fingers opening buttons and made a heart on window your initials and mine entwined curled lip of letters feeling like my need to be wrapped in you Even then I knew there was more than this heavy breathing the essence of warped mirror fogged reflection felt inside the epidermal thought I yearned for you past the soft slide of seduction on leather seat to a place far beyond the touch of skin on skin or lust on lust for then and still to relate as epiphanic cousins ============================== OK...that tears it... all day this steaming my screen while Im here bored to tears with Uncle Sam and tax forms... how much can a mere moth take? I see you must have had the WHITE CHOCOLATE RASPBERRY CHEESE CAKE TOO!!  "of the way we felt standing over our awakening your thigh against mine" OH GOOD GRIEF... I'M NOT GOING TO GET ANY WORK DONE TODAY!!  lol[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (04-11-2002 04:28 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A queenly topping to a day of pleasure, you come along and make the rest of us want to know how you do that... poor Cpat...no work getting done... poor Moth...no work getting done THERE either... [This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-11-2002 04:31 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Absolutely lovely...James |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
No work getting done here either! LOL. I have been sitting here staring at the screen since you posted this Martie girl! My mind....back there, in the back seat... Thank you for the remember today! Yup! You sure can tell it's Spring! ~Hugs~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, YAY!!! (kiss on cheek) May spring blossom in your heart and offer you sweet memories and may more to cherish always, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
*Jaw drops to the ground* I simply love it!! hehe definately you've painted a picture in my mind... *picks up her jaw as she slowly walks away*Kristen |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A lovely reflection, Martie! Especially loved the last couple of lines! Cor |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oh Martie.....this is fantastic....and do I ever relate to those moments at 18, not 16....late start.... Those were the days of backseats and drive-ins....Remember them well... |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
eloquent..to be so intertwined Martin |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
a stolen page from many a young love's youth. Perhaps the essence of good poetry is the ability to appeal to moments, thoughts, we have all felt. it doesn't get any better than this, Martie! I won't spoil the mood of your poem with a tacky response, ok? *s* jeff |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Martie, you take a backseat to no one! Ah, the wonderful memories of, like Cpat, the back hills of Missouri on chilly, starlit nights in my old, believe it or not, Edsel!  Well, they had big back seats! Beautiful writing, Martie!  |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
curled lip of letters feeling like my need to be wrapped in you I really love the way you write, Martie...  ~many teenage hugs~copyright2002 Lyra Nesius |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
 Lets see how many more people we can distract with this today. Lady, I don't think I've ever read this side of you, but I love it. It was a pleasant surprise to open this.  |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lovely view lady can see you there a thousand times there in your mind too |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Okay... another day begins and my usefulness ends as I join the distracted crowd. *G* Your wonderful words are an effective weapon against work, dear lady. LOL |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
I remember a beach...but it isn't quite so romantic, though it does involve 16 lol... loved it as usual..(but I have a problem with the dropping of "the's" and "a's" - interested to know the reason behind that technique?)  K |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Oh this takes me back and puts me in the here and now, all at the same time. Do you suppose a woman ever lets go of her school girls heart? I think the right man can tempt and take her there again, lighting the fire that puts a sparkle in her eyes. Loved the anticipation and the way you tell it Martie~ |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'Those nights at 16 we dream still of timid intimate knowing and the turns of the coast highway remind me in the bold way the cliff falls and distributes rocks into the crashing ocean of the way we felt standing over our awakening your thigh against mine and the sea endless and sure connects us like forever' This is awesome writing, Martie...incredible images...I'm going to read this one quite a few times...and, I agree with J: definitely the white chocolate raspberry cheesecake... sp    I've been down this road forever, |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
I just love the coast and its highways, at least when I don't have to hurry. ;o} Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Martie, the day I feel that again is the day I get married again boy, do I remember those heated nights, and seeing that I am not working I may just go read this all over again, and drift on back in time. Do you hear me humming "Blue Velvet"?~* Sharon *~ |
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