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ThisDiamond
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0 posted 2002-04-22 10:33 PM


Lead me here, to sear the flesh of smoke majestic
Tangled talons of the heart and soul eclectic
Lead me here, to feel the burn of white, unbridled
Tinged in melted fever bound in gold beguiled

Longingly to fan the embers in the last of languish
Tanned and tethered to the white of ending anguish
Listened well the lullaby of breaths consoling
Lead me here, the face to face of thunder rolling

Let me in and find the noble and the earth shake
Steam escapes the closed of path within the earthquake
Let me know a deeper dream than that recounted
Leave me here, to ride the white of passion mounted

Copyright Kkh 4/22/02

[This message has been edited by ThisDiamond (04-23-2002 10:57 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 Kathleen Harris - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-22 11:49 PM


TD--the meter of this is exquisite--could you perhaps fill me in? I THINK I counted an 11-syllable construct. And the flow of this is superb, and images vivid and sharp.

Total admiration from me to you.   

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2 posted 2002-04-23 12:16 PM


ttotally powerful
  

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3 posted 2002-04-23 12:19 PM


Kathleen,
Smokin'!

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4 posted 2002-04-23 10:44 PM


This was fantastic and certainly needs more reading than these few, congratulations on a superb poem.

~* Sharon *~

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5 posted 2002-04-23 11:07 PM




(smiles) Wow, I love this, sweet friend, your gorgeous words always make me smile! (sigh) I envisioned you mounting a unicorn for some reason reading this, galloping away to your dreams! (big hugggsssss) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kathleen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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6 posted 2002-04-24 01:25 AM


Let me know a deeper dream than that recounted
Leave me here, to ride the white of passion mounted


Awesome writing ...
*~coco~*

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7 posted 2002-04-24 01:57 PM


You bring nobility to the ache of falling apart. Ooo, thanks for the poem idea!
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8 posted 2002-04-24 02:00 PM


..Fantastic!!...

ThisDiamond
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9 posted 2002-04-24 08:47 PM


There is an electricity on the blue pages that seems to revitalize the tones of what we felt and feel.
Thank you for all your inspiration. ThisDiamond

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