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Your Veil |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
This not knowing Lays over my eyes Like sheerest silk Caressing my face With softness of Fine smooth fibers Woven in intricate Patterns allowing Illusions of images But not defining the Detail of why If this were a lover’s veil It would with bedroom swish Uncover the intimate Hidden barely before To display in naked form The skin of understanding But Silk is stronger than steel For size and weight And this is not a touch Of gentle care though It lies lightly on me Waiting perhaps for a twist From your heart To tighten in garroting strangle Cutting off all hope Of breathing again Us |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
silk steel... how well you capture pain... |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Cpat~ You are truly an amazing talent... ~wow~ How I've missed your words. I love to look at things through your perspective. I felt every line of this poem....very powerful writing sir. Hugs, ~Krista  Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sunshine: Thank you for the comment. One does not know sometimes what lies inside until it is written. Smitten: You are far too kind...but thank you for reading and for taking time to comment. It is greatly appreciated. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
CPatHair~ 'If this were a lover’s veil It would with bedroom swish Uncover the intimate Hidden barely before To display in naked form The skin of understanding' I just loved these thoughts ... *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
But Silk is stronger than steel For size and weight And this is not a touch Of gentle care though It lies lightly on me Waiting perhaps for a twist From your heart To tighten in garroting strangle Cutting off all hope Of breathing again Us I've sat in this same wait...trying to brace for the fall. Excellent write, Ron. One of your best, I believe. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Duncan: Thank you sir for your kind words... such waits are not an easy thing, but time tells all and it is never still. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron I felt this so vividly because I understand this effort to breathe through someone else's intention...Very well done, my friend. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Parachutes are made up of silk so you can jump safely out of the bedroom window  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Martie: thanks for your words... yes it is hard to breathe at times through anothers intentions. Loper.... I can jump, but I don't know if the chute would open to break my fall in time to keep me from breaking something... thanks to both of you.. the words are appreciated greatly |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
you are trying still to see, to breath in the other, it is much sadder when the silk turns burlap and there is no desire to find out what is on the other side...there is in this write a sadness, but there is still a hope, that lays deep, that things will be different....... great poem *shakes her head in amazement* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
YES..silk stronger than steel some heavy trues in that enjoyed it Cpat |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...WOW!!... ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
If this were a lover’s veil It would with bedroom swish Uncover the intimate Hidden barely before To display in naked form The skin of understanding... I too, love this part especially M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
beautiful sad write |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) WOW!!! This indeed shines with loves mysteries, sweet friend, silk is indeed stronger than steel in some way for silk can always hide such complexity in a lovers heart and only when it is sheer can we see love through ones eyes! (big hugggssssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
This is an exceptional metaphor, m'friend... but you knew that..  |
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