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Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

0 posted 2002-04-10 11:35 AM

He strolls her back
to a dangerous feel in young again…
stilettoed sharper,

concentrated consent
aspiring,

suspicious in delight when delved
by older mind,
he a qualified veteran of many wars
winning each one
by grin alone

she sees red flags
waves them forward
braving them on

and red flags her lips,
pouting puts
him closer still

she

as dangerous

as he

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

1 posted 2002-04-10 11:43 AM

Deca

You go girl!!

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

2 posted 2002-04-10 12:27 PM

yes... this I understand..

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2002-04-10 01:38 PM

*smiling* ...
Decca dear...your writing with Red ink...and Im so enjoying these several that Ive read...
red flags? ahh yes...know them well, they are of the same as that of the pretty blue flame

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2002-04-10 02:08 PM

WOW!! Deca..Deca...Deca! YES!!!

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2002-04-10 02:10 PM

her red lips invite
danger Will Robinson says
his love fevered mind

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

6 posted 2002-04-10 02:37 PM

does this mean you are wearing red?
he sounds dangerous to me
but you do too..

enjoyed the views

LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

7 posted 2002-04-10 02:45 PM

That would do it for me, Deca!

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

8 posted 2002-04-10 03:59 PM

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

9 posted 2002-04-10 04:55 PM

BRAVO!!! I love the way Interloper interpreted this as "Danger, Will Robinson, Danger!", that's the impression I got reading this too, this is excellent! (big hugggsssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend, BRAVO!!! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

10 posted 2002-04-10 04:59 PM

excellent writing...

regards,
sudhir

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

11 posted 2002-04-10 05:00 PM

This is deep....mysterious and full of Deca
heat!

Severn
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-07-17

Posts 7704

12 posted 2002-04-10 08:33 PM

I see many words that are different and then I think all is possible...and it is! The light of revelation...heh..sorry, hon, couldn't help it...BAD little K.

i've always had a problem with colours, so I don't like the red. I'd prefer to think red rather than see it.

He strolls her back
to a dangerous feel in young again…
stilettoed sharper,

Marvellous opening, but I would consider omitting punctuation in this piece...

good job over all

K

Saunni
Senior Member

since 2000-07-11

Posts 1777
West Virginia

13 posted 2002-04-10 10:16 PM

Decaflame...so awesome!! Woo Hoo! And, I wouldn't change anything! It's perfect!

Sauni @~~~>~~

The Sun Shines
Not On Us, But In Us
The River Flows Not Past,
But Through Us

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