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Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

0 posted 2002-04-09 09:44 PM

Inspired by RosePetal's title...

Mother May I

Mother may I
break free from the hold of you
from the mold of safety and protection
that ignorance is bliss
to find that life isn't so kind, afterall

Mother may I
love you enough
to show you that sometimes
even I stumble and fall,
and little girls aren't made up of ribbons and curls,
that we too are rebellion and regret

Mother may I
break your heart,
just this once,
to fly on the catalyst of your withered wings
through skies that storm of a past that's not forgotten
no matter how much you want it to be

Mother may I
remove the blindfold of your embrace
to watch the eyes that reflect back
from the truth of looking glass
and see the face of the child within
that had to grow up too soon
with a wise immaturity

Mother may I
become what you had feared
to throw in the towel of dreams
and learn how to swim through the cynicism of lessons survived
to find that I am in fast forward of rewind
going nowhere through reality
with optimism most fragile

I have loved deeply and painfully
and yet, to be loved in return
has never kissed the lips of my soul.
I know that fate's timing is not my own,
but, I am tired of waiting
and I have out-grown Cupid's game of red rover,
for, I have no strength left
to try to break through the arms of 'someday'

Mother may I
strip the red rose from the garden of your hope
and peel off the petals with my tears
of he loves me, he loves me not
as I become the thorns on the wilt of love

By Melissa P. Monette

Marsha

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since 2000-07-10

Posts 7423
Maidstone Kent England

1 posted 2002-04-09 09:52 PM

Melissa darling girl, this is utterly utterly wonderful, I love the imagery and the language in this. This reads so beautifully, full of longing and yearning. I know how you feel darling girl I really do, it’s so difficult to hold on to hopes and dreams. But you have to ask yourself the one question that’s the hardest to answer ……… is it worth it? Love is worth any price, and the hope of true love ahhhhhh how can the soul survive if it doesn’t have that hope. Absolutely wonderful use of language and vivid pictures I really do like this. Wonderful writing utterly wonderful

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

skyshine

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since 2002-02-07

Posts 3058
Beneath the northern stars

2 posted 2002-04-09 10:11 PM

This is an interesting idea. I'll have to go find RosePetal's poem. I liked the theme in here very much, that sometimes we need to get out and experience things for ourselves instead of having them kept from us. Well done.

~sky

I'm in charge, and I say question authority!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2002-04-09 10:26 PM

Melissa this is a most beautiful, and utterly profound write! I believe we all have felt these very thoughts at some point in our lives. Enjoyed so very much!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2002-04-09 10:55 PM

YAY!!! OH MY GOSH, I JUST KNOW MY LOVE IS GOING TO BE SO HAPPY WHEN SHE READS THIS, THIS IS WONDERFUL!!! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, may the rose you hold sparkle with true loves promise and sing to your heart always, we all love you so much! This is gorgeous, sweet friend, I know my sweet Joanna will love this, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

5 posted 2002-04-10 07:30 AM

Oh Missy, this is so quietly sad. How often do we go against our mothers wishes, to forge our own way in the world. I would always go against my wisdom, only later to find out she was right. She did not delight in saying I told you so at those times…though she did sometimes say it. I’m sure the role of a mother must be hard when they see their daughter making the mistakes that they saw coming. Love this piece lady. You write lost love more beautifully than anyone I’ve read.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Sven

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since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2002-04-11 03:26 PM

there's a quiet sadness to this. . . but yet, it's open and free. . . the child born and letting go. . .but yet, holding on. . .

you know that I like it Melissa. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

RosePetal

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since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

7 posted 2002-04-12 11:44 AM

wow, melissa, this is outstanding writing that I surely can relate to.
I'm glad to have inspired you dear friend

snowpants
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since 2000-09-16

Posts 2061
KS

8 posted 2002-04-13 03:38 AM

Wonderfully expressed, Melissa...I must say that this definitely hits home, as have a few others in here tonight...excellent message, as I realize it is hard to let go, but life must be experienced by each individual, not just through another's eyes and experiences...thanks for sharing this...great write!

sp

I've been down this road forever,
and the time has come to circle back home.

[This message has been edited by snowpants (04-13-2002 03:41 AM).]

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