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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Just waiting she sat cross-legged, there, on the bed the invite was there, gone unsaid when she was busy oh he needed her… when she gave time he feared of his sure years separated their generation gapped too many wrong words left them sapped damn but her dreams had been forever now here they sat on edges of never sharpened words in wait to commit the sever she sat cross-legged on dreams still young a strangled song gone unsung |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
perhaps at the window she saw the reflection of another that carried her youth on his sleeve deca, can imagine this scene but a new day waiting just outside enjoyed the view of it all |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The first part made me think of a flirtation... with a world of opportunities ahead. *S* But then comes the sadness of opportunities lost... the story of all too many lives. *S* Well done, Deca... I like this! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
now here they sat on edges of never I feel that way sometimes...I enjoyed the emotional write.*s Maureen |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
"a strangled song gone unsung So much said with so few words...I can relate to this. Beautiful, ~Krista Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) This is a sad poem with the thoughts of lost dreams and chances, sweet friend, my heart goes out to feel this way and I pray that in the end the wait is worth it by loves sweet suprises! (sigh) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is powerfully heartfelt! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always nshine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
yep, to often it happens deca....you write of it well....very well!! Like a red brick, |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Deca...how well I know this feeling... Just waiting...oh yes...I know! Great imagery...sad write. Thank you, and I did so much enjoy this one tonight. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Deca A truthfilled and emotive write. A good thing, this. Hugs! |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I always relate to your words and this one goes even beyond my sighs and hidden emotion, this is excellent writing... Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sad...I can relate well. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
'too many wrong words left them sapped damn but her dreams had been forever now here they sat on edges of never sharpened words in wait to commit the sever' This hits way too close to home, but, regardless, this is an excellently written poem...I like it a lot... sp    And though my heart feels all alone without you |
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