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Sure Undone
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Sure Undone |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Sure Undone A slide of hair touched him on turn to aware of fabric soft just learned Not bought but captured in the light by meadow of begin delight The sky was covered by soft cloud moss One moved just then to spin the floss To brightest gleam within the capture Springtime beam a ray enraptured To touch became his must delight He followed path to river bright To find the dark head caught in play Like moonbeams on a pool it lay In him she opened electric day That took him from his path away To place where time came sure undone She touched his mirror with her sun |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
To touch became his must delight He followed path to river bright To find the dark head caught in play Like moonbeams on a pool it lay In him she opened electric day That took him from his path away To place where time came sure undone She touched his mirror with her sun =================================== You know Im loving this one... seems like its been awhile since you rhymed....and we all know you are the free verse queen...but you rhyme like it comes easy for you... this gem sure goes down easy...cadenced kissed and a delight to read aloud. *sigh*   |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
martie this is showing some movies and daydreams all in little mirrors of thought cool stuff lady |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Y'know, I think I enjoy reading the responses almost as much as I enjoy the imagery you tend to leave behind in shadows of light... so if there were a "click" every time I come back to read the growing responses.... you'd be the Queen of Clicks... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Like moonbeams on a pool it lay Wish I could have thought of that. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) This is sooooooo beautiful, sweet friend, and may that smile her sun shows always reflect in the mirrors of his heart and spread loves light between them! (kiss on cheek) Your words always blossom like spring flowers, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Reading this is my just delight |
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