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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Late in the afternoon bathed in the warmth of the sun lowering myself into the sinking immersed in your body scent it is there underwater shifting sands on the ocean floor where music plays and echoes and waves roll in a rush swaying to the rhythm that moves beneath the sea~ |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like this...it felt good... |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
sounds like a romantic serenade on the ocean bottom..maybe its at sunset with tide rolling out..imaginative, well done  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I agree with Sunshine...tis a good feelin' that this poem does give! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) This is such a soft serenade, sweet friend, such love and passion and rhythm fills these words! (kiss on cheek) We all love you so much, sweet friend, this is fabulous! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks to you lady and all you fine gentlemen, I appreciate it. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
BluesSerenade~ I felt the movement of this piece~ *HUGS* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, Would that be high tide or low tide?  Or doesn't it matter? Good write. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
something about this makes me want to go to the beach somewhere private and warm enjoyed this bluez |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
BluesSerenade - Been in that place and felt the ryhthm, nice write... BC |
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strbbux Member Elite
since 2001-12-19
Posts 3859 |
This is awesome dear girl. floria Floria |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Blues Sounds like a peace place...I think I need the beach now too. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
this was just GORGEOUS! i love the images you created in this, perfect poetry as far as I am concerned...lovely writing...warms the heart. take care. amy "you can't stop |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Bluesy, you know I love this, right? cause I so do |
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imagine315 New Member
since 2002-04-10
Posts 6 |
where music plays and echoes and waves roll in a rush swaying to the rhythm that moves beneath the sea~ What a beautiful flow & lovely choice of words ~*~ Very much enjoyed... |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Beautifully written My thoughts just seemed to drift away into the waves of your words..I look forward to reading more, it was a delight Kristen |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Marge~ I'm glad you felt it, thanks. Larry~ What tides? I'm so far under I don't notice the difference anymore. DS~ I'm so glad you got my drift and made yourself cozy. Thank you Stranger~ BC~ The sea is never still, even when she is calm there is still a mysterious rhythm beneath it all. Nice to see you here BC~ Floria~ Thanks, I appreciate you deary!! Martie~ It's warming up here, and the beach is most definitely part of my weekend plans. Thanks Martie~ Amy, Amy~ If I have warmed your heart then I have succeeded... your are always so kind. Suffice to say I am touched by your replies. *hugs across the miles*~ SEA~ I hoped you might, seeing that we're on the same beach and all. You're sweet! Imagine~ Welcome to these blue pages, and thank you for your kind words! Kristen~ Likewise, it's a delight to here fom you as well. It took me a long time to get comfortable here, but it has been worth every second. Thanks again~ [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (04-11-2002 07:59 PM).] |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Lori, your words never cease to stun me. Beautiful. Dee Stand straight and tall, not the reflection as others see you, but as you truely are. Clearwater |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I love reading you..*s wish I could write as well. hugss M |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ah, this is fun to dream about! Sinking into the waves, rolling around......and here I sit watching more snowflakes fall. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ooooh! Don't know how I missed this one.... wow....love the feel of this... excellent write. ~Hugs~ |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i never read this before shame shame is my name nice write [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (04-17-2002 08:08 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hugs Dee~ and thank you always for being so kind~ Maureen~ Oh my, now you have me all flustered! Interesting how we read others work and share the feelings behind them. Thanks~ Midnitsun~ The sinking and rolling of the waves could also be compared to the falling and melting of snowflakes. That is something I don't experience in my winters. I thank you for that thought. Nancy~ Thank you for your touch, and the warm feelings you leave, it is so nice of you and I am appreciative of them. *smirk* Thanks Walt~ |
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craigrk Member
since 2001-12-23
Posts 123 |
very unique image. thanks for the read |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Craig~ I'm glad you enjoyed the images.That is if being unique means that you liked them. I'm not one to assume anything. Thanks again~ |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Excellent write. Enjoyed the feeling of this one. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Lori~ Dancing the sea are we?? LOVELY!! what an image....very peaceful.... HUGSSSLauren~ Step through the |
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