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Interloper
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Deep in the heart

0 posted 2002-04-08 05:28 PM


If this is a repost, please accept my apology.
This is a work before I "discovered" Senryu here at Passions

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Just the two of us
committed to each other
no reservations have we
only longing resides here
where other thoughts once called home

There is one small word
that talks only about me
and that word is "I"

I give you my life
take my heart for it is yours
I shall need it not
unconditionally yours
take tenderly to your care

Yet another word
speaks so emotionally
and that word is "love"

You give me your love
I cherish it forever
I give you my love
and you have humbled me so
you take my love as your love

There is a third word
that does not talk about we
and that word is "you"

You whom I adore
the reason for my being
you on pedestal
far above all others here
you, the woman of my dreams

Three words, I love you
what more can I say my love
I love you, I do.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

© Copyright 2002 The Tall Texan aka Doctor Love - All Rights Reserved
Ivy Rose
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1 posted 2002-04-08 05:33 PM


Interloper....This poem is new to me. It is very beautiful and beautifully presented.

Thanks for posting this, ***Ivy Rose

Marsha
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2 posted 2002-04-08 05:49 PM


Bob darling boy I think this is utterly utterly spectacular. This a truly outstandingly fabulous poem. Such simple words, combined in perfection in your marvellous and utterly unique way. Truly perfect writing, and I love it


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


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3 posted 2002-04-08 05:54 PM


Hmmm no apologies here, this is wonderful. Those three little words are wonderful and so is your poetry. floria

Floria

"Alas for those that never sing,
But die with all their music in them"
(Oliver Wendell Holmes)

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines
4 posted 2002-04-08 07:51 PM


I love how you did this.. it's wonderful and tender

M

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The Shores of Alone
5 posted 2002-04-08 07:54 PM


All that happiness, it could be contagious
Like this lots.
Sandra

walker
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6 posted 2002-04-08 08:13 PM


Love it.
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2002-04-08 08:24 PM



I do believe you should never restrict your writing to one form....and this proves it...


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8 posted 2002-04-08 10:25 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, I love the pattern of senryus and tankas in here, sweet friend, like strings of pearls they come together to declare your love for her so beautifully! (big hugggssssss) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet frien, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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9 posted 2002-04-08 10:49 PM


WOW!  Interloper, this is breathtaking!

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Marge Tindal
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10 posted 2002-04-08 10:54 PM


InterLoper~
My 'thoughts and suggestions' are that this is wonderful ... and you should do more~
This is some-kinda-wonderful~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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CocoBaci
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11 posted 2002-05-01 01:05 AM


Interloper, I've never read this oneb4but I sure am glad I got this chance2read it now...
I so much enjoy reading your poetry where love and adore of your special one is written so eloquently in verse like this one...
It's beautiful and I thank you4sharing...
Hugs2uSweetPoetFriend
*~coco~*

BluesSerenade
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By the Seaside
12 posted 2002-05-02 12:57 PM


If love were only for the taking to the one we want to give it to, the world would go round and stop spinning so fast!!!
Endearing words you write.

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