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Glass Bottomed
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Glass Bottomed |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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Drink deep of me and I will be all your dreams made whole Take this cup and from it sup my passion is made whole. Each night you sleep in passions keep beware the tempter's lure for while you drink your soul does shrink and lost to loving cure.Then come the dawn and I am gone your dreams in disarray in deep regret you can't forget and ever rue the day. Did you know you'd need it so, when first you had begun. or does the claim built up by fame now have you on the run. You can't see the pain in me is blinded by your choice, and I too drink to stop my think I drink to still my voice. You cannot know in drink I show whatever I may be and you won't be a part of me till drink sets us both free. Each drink we take, makes vows forsake. Your love for me grows wan. I'll drink with you , you know I do just so we can go on. In dawn's new light held by this plight our passion is well met in glass of true I drink to you so all things we forget Upon these words I gasp and choke and raise my glass in toast of coke Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Keth darling sister of my soul and painter of my dreamers skies OH YES!! This is exceptional writing, utterly utterly brilliant. You have truly outdone yourself this time. Every single word in this is utterly perfect, you’ve really written this perfectly I read this and thought, Oh WOW, this it is an excellent poem and deserves wide acclaim. Outstanding writing as always YOU darling heart excel TRULY AWESOME. I forgive you for being multi-talented, I forgive you for writing time and again words that ring with wonder, I even forgive you for teasing a little innocent soul like me. I’d forgive you anything because you write sooooooooo well, and there was another reason what was it? Ahhh oh yes and because I wub you. Softly breathy sigh of thank you love, that’ll do darling girl Only you can do shapes as wondrous as this.   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Magicmystery Senior Member
since 2002-02-13
Posts 821Windsor, Ontario, Canada |
You can't see the pain in me is blinded by your choice, and I too drink to stop my think I drink to still my voice I loved this part particularly... but I just adored the entire piece... and I like how you made it into a bottle.....  Love, Light and Peace, Sherry Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow. |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Auntie Kethp this my favourite aunt is to steal mum’s phrase utterly wonderful. How on earth do you do such a complex shape, I’m amazed. Mum can manage easy things, Can’t anyone? But only someone with your incredible skill could manage something this beautiful. The words flow with the ease of liquid down a thirsty throat, and YOU are definitely a quencher of poetry’s thirst. Awesome writing, excellent presentation, and I’m clapping wildly with delight. Auntie Kethp this is utterly utterly utterly excellent I’ve been spending way too much time with my mum She’s right though this is utterly excellent Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I didn't expect the ending..but it was a rather intense write for me to read.. One I would like to save and read over again *s M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
K-lady you are a vase of golden this is exceptional |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Kethry - you are simply amazing. I'm very impressed... BC |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Kethry another amazing piece from you, like it a lot as always ((hugs)) Charisma |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You can't see the pain in me is blinded by your choice, and I too drink to stop my think I drink to still my voice. This poem is incredible, Kethry... excellence from beginning to unexpected ending. *S* But these lines above... they slipped right into my soul... WOW!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Keth, The genie in that bottle will get out some day. Exceptional write.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice expression...James |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
yes. . . well done my friend. . . very pleasing. . .  -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) WOW!!! Oh my gosh, I am speechless, this is an excellent passionate masterpiece, I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) Your way with words and form never ceases to amaze me, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kethry, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Artful write! I just gotta know, what's in the coke? |
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