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Passion
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0 posted 2003-04-12 10:36 PM


Ok...this is my 2cd real poem...and you gotta remember, I'm only 13 ok? So anyway, I tried real hard, and I hope you like it.

Sweet Dreams

The vast stars fill the void of the night.
The eerie moonlight casts shadows on the dewed grass.
And blissfully I walk.
My partner- hand in hand.
The brook flows quickly and murmurs to us.
An enchanting voice it has.
We draw near and gaze into the shallow creek.
I turn to my lover and inquire;
"Doth my reflection bring joy to thy sight?"
Returning my gaze he replies;
"Yes, your reflection brings great joy to my sight. But what I see is not skin and hair.
What I see is your heart.
And it is beautiful beyond imagine and compare."
I fall into his arms and he holds me tight.
Skin to skin.
Heart to heart.
I feel his chest rise and fall.
Listen to his breath-
in and out.
Like gripping the very essence of life.
He holds me in his arms,
tightly and securely,
not wanting to let go.
Holding me.
Loving me.
I gently place my head under his chin.
Then all is silent.
The brook runs quiet.
The stars fade away.
Swiftly the dawn arrives
and I awaken from my subconcious mind-
wishing reality was as sweet.

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1 posted 2003-04-12 11:06 PM


Passion~ This is a very nice poem for only being your second one. If you haven't checked out the Teen Forum or the Poetry Workshop you should give them a try and see if you like them...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

littlewing
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2 posted 2003-04-13 12:23 PM


Passion - nice job - nice imagery
reads like prose - is beautiful
If I had thse stalents at your age
I would be writing like
Shakespeare today
Keep it up . . . xxoo

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