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Sunshine
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0 posted 2003-04-12 11:14 AM



The Journey, Part V

Ginger’s Challenge
20. If I Could Write A Column


“this was his last father/daughter gift…
the one they would always hold in gold…

and he watched as his dream for his Sagittarian child
became one with the animal,”

~*~

Now, in her spell of solitary, being one with beast,
she dismounted, and stood young on terra firma,
and gathered in herself sun’s energy,
with the essence of awareness beginning to seep in,
slowly,

where it was she should have been – for the first time,
keenly kindred with eons and she bent, to touch
earth, caressing stems of grass, plucking heads
of energy encapsulated in seeds of moment ~

and it began, this ripple, of what she would be leaving
behind, and going towards, and now centuries of blood
coursed warm in realization of all that had been,
steps taken to bring her to this flash,
and knowing a blink
would either bring tears, or determination,

as she realized the land was made of bone and
dust, growth and death, promise, and destiny…

for this dawning time, she found the native land
welcoming her once again, in the Midwest,
finally comprehending that though salt of sea
had fed her youth, her footsteps belonged
here, to take her where her time had first
come about – as the wisps of yesterday began to part,

but it was too much, too soon, and the wisps
receded, but the memories had not…
and they whispered,

give us time, and we will visit you, again,
but only if you stay
close
for here is where our voices are strong,
where you will feel the timbre of shudder
as you trod once again, the plains song,
and bring the light forth
once more…


but she was sure it was just the meadowlark’s song
as it was the ring-neck pheasant’s flight
into the bluest skies that burned into her eyes…

for as she remounted her horse,
aware of a new sense of serenity,
for no matter what steps she might take
she would be walking them for reasons beyond her ken,
and for the moment
she became confident she would touch stone
and understand in full

as a sketch of time would fall
beneath her hand
to unfold

in Ginger’s column.

~*~

Larry Chadwick’s Challenge:   /pip/Forum7/HTML/000552.html  
The hat is still waiting for you to reach in.

Larry…I hope this has met your challenge…
and I hope that you believe
Ginger is smiling…

As others will come, to add to her list…
And will feel the growth of her wisdom,
That she brought to us, through you.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-12-2003 11:15 AM).]

© Copyright 2003 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
kaile
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1 posted 2003-04-12 01:11 PM


Phenomenal series!!

beautiful imagery that deal with themes such as coming-of-age and returning-to-roots...i much enjoyed the reads...thank you

Dark Angel
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2 posted 2003-04-12 04:36 PM


Well Sunshine...A Phenomenal series indeed!
I echo Kaile.. the images are beautiful.. how each thought and action was brought to life.. Fantabulous!

Absolutely a challenge well met.

doing the library thng again

Maree.

Kethry
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3 posted 2003-04-12 05:29 PM


Sunshine,
each installment was a gem, each image a treasure and the whole piece was a sparkling reminder of what words can do. Brilliant!
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Janet Marie
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4 posted 2003-04-13 06:39 PM


the moth is bookmarking this series to read when I can get caught up from my poetry hiatus later this week ...like a bad rash...I will be back   

Ocean wrapped around the sun
Sky fell down & pulled us in
stole away my oxygen...
left me breathless there with you.

SH

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5 posted 2003-04-13 07:00 PM


Karilea,
Just wanted you to know..I have been to this series, have read, enjoyed them so much..and popped them into my library to read and read again.
Wonderful..I can't describe in words how your answer to this challenge made me feel.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Larry C
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6 posted 2003-04-13 11:25 PM


Karilea,
======================================
for no matter what steps she might take
she would be walking them for reasons beyond her ken,
and for the moment
she became confident she would touch stone
and understand in full
======================================

This states what I only understood after she was gone. But this five part column you have written is a gift most precious to me. I will always cherish it and the tender heart which created it. Thank you dear friend.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

SPIRIT
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7 posted 2003-04-14 12:48 PM


Magnificent writing.
Janet Marie
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8 posted 2003-04-21 04:27 PM


as she realized the land was made of bone and
dust, growth and death, promise, and destiny…

for this dawning time, she found the native land
welcoming her once again, in the Midwest,
finally comprehending that though salt of sea
had fed her youth, her footsteps belonged
here, to take her where her time had first
come about – as the wisps of yesterday began to part,

but it was too much, too soon, and the wisps
receded, but the memories had not…
and they whispered,

give us time, and we will visit you, again,
but only if you stay
close
for here is where our voices are strong,
where you will feel the timbre of shudder
as you trod once again, the plains song,
and bring the light forth
once more…

but she was sure it was just the meadowlark’s song
as it was the ring-neck pheasant’s flight
into the bluest skies that burned into her eyes…

for as she remounted her horse,
aware of a new sense of serenity,
for no matter what steps she might take
she would be walking them for reasons beyond her ken,
and for the moment
she became confident she would touch stone
and understand in full
==============================


yeeessssssssss
just as you know you belong to the plain's sky....
your pen belongs to poetry....
You need to find a publisher....
then quit your day job

You're the best I've ever felt ...
it's so wrong not to be with you.
It's getting harder to stay away,
it stops my heart just to be with you.

SH

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