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littlewing
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0 posted 2003-04-11 06:57 PM


I sit
and eat
my french fries

like any good little girl would do

blank stare
The only light
the eyes of my son
playing
alive

at least a part of me is alive

Sitting here
stoic
drugged yet desensitized
this world
people
disgust me
waxlike
nearly transparent to me now

I see beneath the smiles
the gestures , the french fries
all of it
I see beneath
and surmise

They just know
how to pretend
better than I

[This message has been edited by littlewing (04-11-2003 07:01 PM).]

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Margherita
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1 posted 2003-04-11 07:09 PM


Dear Sue this is powerful and so well written. Your son is the innocence with which we all bloomed in our childhood ... and the world's events are so sickening that it is indeed difficult to maintain optimism for humankind.
But we must align with children's hope for a better world ...
To survive at times we pretend that everything's just fine ... yes.
Hugs, my friend.
Margherita

Edder
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2 posted 2003-04-11 07:11 PM


you possess great insight. passion such as yours can at times be a burden, but know that in your son more than just a part of you lives. my heart goes out to you littlewing

[This message has been edited by Edder (04-11-2003 07:13 PM).]

vandana
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3 posted 2003-04-11 07:12 PM


enjoyed
Larry C
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4 posted 2003-04-11 07:34 PM


Sue,
You're pretending? I'm glad you're not very good at it! Nice write.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Ringo
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5 posted 2003-04-11 08:46 PM


I sit
and eat
my french fries

Is there any better way to be??? As usual, a great job.

When the morning cries and you don't know why...

jwesley
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6 posted 2003-04-11 09:29 PM


Great!  I loved this!

jwesley

Bill Charles
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7 posted 2003-04-11 09:44 PM


littlewing - your writings are excellent, as this one is...

BC

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8 posted 2003-04-11 10:15 PM


BRILLIANT!
this one really beats my heart

your transparency is multi-hued

garysgirl
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9 posted 2003-04-11 10:25 PM


Sue, sometimes we have to just put on a smile and go on.......because, what is the alternative?  If we give into our troubles all the time and never smile, we would die inside. I know......  
Heart Hugs to you, sweet lady
Ethel  

Sunshine
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10 posted 2003-04-11 10:30 PM


Just when you think things are becoming dark,
your child smiles, and the gleam explodes,
and laughter fills you like a break moment of
insanity...
and all becomes right again...

~*~

how quickly these moments run away, Sue...
I know...
and I understand...

hearthugs...

Aenimal
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11 posted 2003-04-11 10:33 PM


the eyes of my son...the inoccence of children lights the way when the ignorance of adults clouds it..it sounds good in my head but probably sounds dumb..i'll
shut up now

littlewing
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12 posted 2003-04-11 10:59 PM


Margherita - always such sweet words - yes pretending I am - and my son - truly is my angel thank you

Edder - so ver sweet - goodness - if this is insight then I dont want it lol - very nice what you said about my son - thank you

vandana - thank you for reading

Larry - heheh sssshhh . . . dont tell - TY

Brad - you know - now fries are my comfort food - thank you

thank you jwelesy for reading

Bill - thank you - coming from you that means a lot

Kacy - multi-hued  - heheh I like that thank you - what a compliment

Ethel - I know but my face is starting to crack . . . thank you

Sun - you got it - right there - that smile always brings me back . . .  thank you

Raph - it doesnt sound dumb at all and please do not ever shut that mouth of yours - your right - the whole time I was sitting there the only thing that did shine was Billy thank you   xxoo

Thanks guys xxoo

wranx
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13 posted 2003-04-12 12:12 PM


Could be, that the pretend and the pretense are learned behaviors.

The bad news? Your son may never have that camoflage.

The good news? With what you give him, he may never need it.

A very good write....An honest write.

littlewing
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14 posted 2003-04-12 04:05 AM


Thank you Ed - made me smile big with that - your words - so very sweet

xxoo

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