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Drexler_McStyles
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Venice, Ca

0 posted 2003-04-10 10:26 PM


it was 3 AM
and we were poaching for crocodiles
or maybe alligators
somewhere in the Louisiana swamplands
I was juggling a shotgun and a bottle
of southern comfort
which I found to be a bit ironic
for all the obvious reasons
mosquitoes do not sleep
or break for breakfast
even when you are breakfast
and all the rustling in the water
had me wondering
what in the hell I was doing here
I vaguely recall someone offering
a large sum of cash
for bringing them the equivalent of
the head of Alfredo Garcia
some ******* Id been drinking near
confused me for his friend
and said “let go get us a gator”
dragging me out through the door
and into his truck
I was too drunk to argue
and was kind of curious
as to what the hell these people do
besides cook gumbo
and throw knives at dartboards
that however
was 2 hours ago
my curiosity now lay
in where the hell I could find
a way out of this muck
and into some dry clothes
I hit the bottle
and started searching for higher ground
all the while
waiting for my legs to come off
or perhaps an arm
into the jaws of a local resident
just as I was getting a foothold on some land
in the distance; an explosion  
and then a human howl
broke the relative silence
then nothing
I didn’t give a ****
which of them
had died
and started looking for the truck
when I found it
I threw the gun in the cab
and went to sleep
in the bed
rising with the sun
I made my way down the road
staggering like Id been shot
and eventually came across
what passed for a highway
somehow, I was able to thumb my way
back to the bar
finding my car
all alone with the gravel
I drove to the hotel
showered
and passed out
whatever memory I once had
about the questions in progress
left me in that slumber
and we are all
better off for it


[This message has been edited by Drexler_McStyles (04-10-2003 10:29 PM).]

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Justbleu
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1 posted 2003-04-10 11:08 PM


I really liked the title....
An interesting tale....Much enjoyed!!!!
Bridgette

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suthern
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Louisiana
2 posted 2003-04-11 03:14 PM


Being a Louisiana gal, I can really appreciate this tale. *G*
Midnitesun
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Gaia
3 posted 2003-04-11 04:52 PM


*groan* I used to juggle SC and a pool cue.
As for alligators?...I left them behind in Florida.

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
4 posted 2003-04-11 05:21 PM


Enjoyed...James
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