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Edder
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0 posted 2003-04-10 09:45 PM



Breathe
I tell myself
you're almost there
just a few more minutes
please legs don't fail me
easy does it
relax a bit
not so tense
Breathe
head spinning
ears ringing
heart pounding
eyes fixed upon beauty
Hey! He's talking to you!
I DO!
"You may kiss the bride"



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Enchantress
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1 posted 2003-04-10 09:47 PM


Ahhh, cute write..much enjoyed!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2003-04-10 09:54 PM


You captured the moment well!

A little bit of the bubbly to calm your nerves maybe!

Fun poem Edder, cheers!

Nightshade
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just out of reach
3 posted 2003-04-10 10:57 PM


Ahh, yes, the wedding jitters. Well done Edder!! Enjoyed. Chris  

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

[This message has been edited by Nightshade (04-10-2003 10:58 PM).]

littlewing
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4 posted 2003-04-11 01:29 AM


Edder - this IS awesome!  Well put - great job hehehe . . . xxoo
passing shadows
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5 posted 2003-04-11 02:18 AM


I almost stopped breathing...

very cute write!

lost_star
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6 posted 2003-04-11 02:25 AM


Beautiful poem. Very creative :-)
KoKo
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7 posted 2003-04-11 10:13 AM


EDDLES!!!!!!!!!! I'm glad you decided to join up!!!!!!! ~hugs~ I loved this, as I always love your work ~biiiiiig hugs~ Can't wait to see what else you put up! ^-^!!!!

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

Earth Angel
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8 posted 2003-04-11 10:51 AM


Golly gee! I certainly knew what it felt like to be a bride at the altar, now I know what it feels like to be a groom!--and they are the same feelings!

Love & Light,
EA

Sunshine
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9 posted 2003-04-11 11:01 AM



A delightful capture of
a moment in time!  Well done!

          Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

Edder
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10 posted 2003-04-11 06:47 PM


Nancy- thank you glad you enjoyed

Blues- thanks...the bubbly also put me in the mood to write it!

Chris- thanks for reading

littlewing- thank you so much. you're much too kind

passing shadows- thank you

lost_star thanks

KoKo- Lauren!! ~Huggles~ thanks for showing me this wonderful place!

Earth Angel- we are more alike than you know! glad you enjoyed

Sunshine- glad you thought so. i welcome your opinion on all my writing

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Gaia
11 posted 2003-04-11 10:31 PM


Smiling at this one. For a minute, I thought you were running in the Boston Marathon!
congratulations on experiencing breathlessness

garysgirl
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12 posted 2003-04-11 10:37 PM


LOL at Kacy's reply. I don't know about the big race, but I did think you were running and getting out of breath.  HaHa!!
You captured the moment just right!!  
Hugs,
Ethel

Edder
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13 posted 2003-04-12 01:26 AM


Kacy- thanks a bunch

Ethel- thanks for the read. i'm gald you enjoyed it. i was in a light-hearted mood and had alot of fun with it.

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