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Kethry
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0 posted 2003-04-10 06:02 PM


My will is weak and dreams untold
have led me to this hallowed fold,
to this dream where time stands still
and I bow down before your will

Your will is strong and standing near
those clouded words impale my ear,
I have no sense of what's to come
but stay until my world's undone

Within the strands of time I wait
passive, still - to meet my fate
your breath exhales as I breathe in
and I, with you, hold skin to skin

This dreaming scape where clouds run free
to cover up the depth of me
and hold to all in hallowed haze
where dreams escape to fill my days

so quiet, still - with will that's weak
I look to you for all I seek,
no dreams of hope are mine just now
and so I stand with furrowed brow

Remembering the times gone past
with wealth of dreams on call at last
my world now emptied to all this
revelling in my lover's kiss

To lose myself within your dreams
becomes naught more than flowing streams
reflecting only thoughts of you,
as tied to dreams, I follow through

Emptying all there is of me
and using dreams to set me free;
holding still in time of bliss
I'm held by dreams of deep abyss

To wake and find in truth of dawn,
my loss is great, for you are gone.
Of love and hope I'm now bereft
so dream me deep in lover's cleft,

till dawn no longer holds its sway
and I am held by dreams all day

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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1 posted 2003-04-10 06:06 PM


"To lose myself within your dreams
becomes naught more than flowing streams
reflecting only thoughts of you,
as tied to dreams, I follow through"

WOW! I love the way your words flow, begging the reader to follow the stream.

NewEnglandlazurlu
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2 posted 2003-04-10 07:29 PM


Kethry, this was an outstanding poem. I enjoyed the words and the flow and the story.

Huggles, Marti

Few are those who see with their own eyes and feel with their own hearts.  A.Einstein

theresa0847
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3 posted 2003-04-10 07:58 PM


It's been a long time since i've actually read true poetry. I enjoyed this one very much. Thank you for sharing.
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4 posted 2003-04-10 08:23 PM


KethryKethryKethry~

My god, this is outstandingly lovely~
Girlfriend ... this IS POETRY~

'stay until my world's undone'

Oh yes ..... ~
Love ya' hooley dooley gal~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Martie
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5 posted 2003-04-10 08:42 PM


Kethry...I felt the honest passion in this beauty of your heart.  
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6 posted 2003-04-11 03:11 PM


There are so many lines I find outstanding I could recopy your poem. *S* I especially like the closing couplet... but the whole flows so beautifully... great write! *S*
Dark Angel
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7 posted 2003-04-11 04:47 PM


Lynne I know when I see you're name upon these pages that Im in for a treat.

This is a beautiful flowing write.

love it!

Maree

Earth Angel
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8 posted 2003-04-11 04:52 PM


You may post your fine poetry less often than I would like---but you sure make the wait worthwile with a poem such as this!

Huggums,
EA

Kethry
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9 posted 2003-04-12 02:53 AM


Midnitesun,
thank you so much for reflecting back the flow.

NewEnglandlazurlu,
I am so glad you enjoyed the story

theresa0847,
thank you I don't know that this is true poetry, but I like it. Thank you for liking it too.

Marge,
when you like my work I know I must have hit an inspirational vein. Thank you for your good opinion, which I value above all else.

Martie,
coming from you, the queen of emotion, that is high praise indeed. Thanks for letting me know you liked this.

suthern,
when you respond to my work, you do so with such an open spirit I can't help but be amazed at your love. Thank you.

Dark Angel,
I hope I fulfilled the promise of a treat you were expecting. Thanks.

Earth Angel,
that you want to read more of my work is a compliment indeed. Thank you.

To all my friends who persistently read and respond to my work in such a positive way thank you one and all.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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10 posted 2003-04-12 09:15 AM


Kethry, this is one of the most beautiful poems I have ever read. It has a little sadness, but so much hopefulness, too.
Hugs,
Ethel

vandana
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11 posted 2003-04-12 07:15 PM


one of your best
JamesMichael
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12 posted 2003-04-12 08:33 PM


Very nice...James
Paul Wilson
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13 posted 2003-04-13 12:10 PM


Kethry~ Your words echo saddness and comfort at the same time. I really enjoyed this poem. Thanks for sharing...Paul

"To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you"

BluesSerenade
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14 posted 2003-04-13 01:12 AM


You're so good Kethry~
Could feel this down deep!

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