The Journey, Part I [challenge]

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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-04-10 03:52 PM

The Journey, Part I

Ginger’s Challenge
20. If I Could Write A Column

Sometimes, wonders appear as
thought:  perhaps now is the time to discover
the why of the write,

which answers itself:
it is so we might find ourselves.

But my search is not for you.
For you must perform your own,
that ceaseless search of intimates,
in glimpse of the selves,
undertaking journeys of discover…
a coming together of whispers that passed us by,
ran through us, or simply running over us
in giggled waylay of childhood,

now steeped in understanding

when summer breaks across the spring
or when fall leaves us in surrender to winter,

or when a memory returns of another day
steeped in scent of apple blossoms
or pine tree fragrance,
and we remember the sliver that scarred us
for life

as we sucked blood from the wound
re-salting memory of birth

and remember baking of bread.

It is the trod we took decades ago
to come back and fit the arch of foot, now,
where sandy burrs clung, as sun sung in wisps of hair
in halo, and slender bodies bent over
to undo a moment

then stood with eyes in full survey of eternity
never questioning then, the why…

but now it comes, in a sense that is still
hidden in depiction

a sketch of time beneath my hand
which may unfold

in Ginger’s column.

~*~

Larry Chadwick’s Challenge:
/pip/Forum7/HTML/000552.html
The hat is still waiting for you to reach in.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (04-10-2003 03:53 PM).]

Marshalzu

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1 posted 2003-04-10 04:02 PM

Absolutely beautiful, I really enjoyed the read

Andrew

vandana

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2 posted 2003-04-10 04:20 PM

nice's challenge

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-04-10 06:21 PM

"when summer breaks across the spring
or when fall leaves us in surrender to winter,

or when a memory returns of another day
steeped in scent of apple blossoms
or pine tree fragrance,
and we remember the sliver that scarred us
for life

as we sucked blood from the wound
re-salting memory of birth

and remember baking of bread."

'Yes'..softly I whisper, 'yes' Karilea...and smile.
You have most certainly met this challenge,
and answered it beautifully.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Midnitesun

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Gaia

4 posted 2003-04-10 06:47 PM

But my search is not for you.
For you must perform your own,
that ceaseless search of intimates,
in glimpse of the selves,
undertaking journeys of discover…
a coming together of whispers that passed us by,
ran through us, or simply running over us
in giggled waylay of childhood,

now steeped in understanding
****************************

yes, it's an individual quest

catalinamoon

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The Shores of Alone

5 posted 2003-04-10 07:40 PM

Kari, everything of yours sounds so full of wisdom. And the touch of McKuen always.
This is beautiful.
Sandra

Martie

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6 posted 2003-04-10 07:47 PM

Karilea ...so wise and wonderful, you are...and this journey is the treasure, indeed!

Gentle Spirit
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7 posted 2003-04-10 08:19 PM

Mum, I knew there was a reason why I was drawn to read tonight, that it felt like it was time......
after reading this I am positive that I now know why, this is most splendid writing...

oh my, how I have missed your wisdom dear Kari....hugs to you.....
(yes, it does mean that I am back...

)

I must have had my momma's will
and Gods Amazing Grace...

I'm a survivor....
(Reba)

Sudhir Iyer
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8 posted 2003-04-11 07:20 AM

This is so wonderfully well done...

regards,
sudhir

kaile

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9 posted 2003-04-11 09:28 AM

i say you more than met the challenge...

when summer breaks across the spring
or when fall leaves us in surrender to winter,

~concise, nice way to show the passing of time

and we remember the sliver that scarred us
for life

~this intrigued me...what kind of "silver"?...

as we sucked blood from the wound
re-salting memory of birth

~unique way to say "life has come full circle"?

sun sung in wisps of hair
~just beautiful

Larry C

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10 posted 2003-04-11 10:34 AM

Karilea,
This write means so very much to me that I can begin to explain. And this line:

=================================
as we sucked blood from the wound
re-salting memory of birth
================================
How cool.
======================================
then stood with eyes in full survey of eternity
never questioning then, the why…

but now it comes, in a sense that is still
hidden in depiction

a sketch of time beneath my hand
which may unfold

in Ginger’s column.
========================
But it was this that caught me unawares and brought so many instant tears to my eyes. I was unprepared. That hasn't happened in quite some time. It was a good release. Thank you sweet friend for all you do for my broken heart.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Dark Angel
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11 posted 2003-04-11 05:16 PM

Oh this is definately a keeper.

A most beautiful write Sunshine

Maree

Margherita
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Eternity

12 posted 2003-04-11 06:46 PM

then stood with eyes in full survey of eternity

Great write, Karilea.
A journey full of harmony.
Love, Margherita

Kethry
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13 posted 2003-04-11 07:01 PM

excellently done!
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Dark Angel
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14 posted 2003-04-12 04:40 PM

I just realised this wasn't added to my library.. hmm so doing the library thingy.

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Sunnyone
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15 posted 2003-04-12 04:52 PM

Oh how I remember the baking of bread.....the smell of home and memories. What a great write, sister Sun......

Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~

garysgirl

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16 posted 2003-04-12 05:49 PM

Karilea, this is wonderful. I couldn't find the first one earlier when I saw the others. I thought it was a continuance in sequence, so I was going to read it that way. Then I went to the link at the end and saw Larry's challenge.

Now, I'm going to read more.

Hugs,
Ethel

Janet Marie
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17 posted 2003-04-19 10:02 AM

Just wanted you to know the moth hasnt forgotten....and will be back...5 times to be exact

You're the best I've ever felt ...
it's so wrong not to be with you.
It's getting harder to stay away,
it stops my heart just to be with you.

SH

Janet Marie
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18 posted 2003-04-21 04:05 PM

But my search is not for you.
For you must perform your own,
that ceaseless search of intimates,
in glimpse of the selves,
undertaking journeys of discover…
a coming together of whispers that passed us by,
ran through us, or simply running over us
in giggled waylay of childhood,

now steeped in understanding

when summer breaks across the spring
or when fall leaves us in surrender to winter,

or when a memory returns of another day
steeped in scent of apple blossoms
or pine tree fragrance,
and we remember the sliver that scarred us
for life
===================================

yessssssssss
oh yesssss...and the best is knowing there is more..................
moth more...................

moving on.....

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