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kaile
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0 posted 2003-04-10 06:40 AM


you cling on to
your tried-and-tested notions of black and write
but don't you see~
even the polar bear is
tainted with algae


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Severn
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1 posted 2003-04-10 06:44 AM


Is it algae? Sad that isn't it...they're so emblematic...purity and whatnot...

I don't suppose you've read the children's story about the panda bear who couldn't decide if he was a black bear with white bits or a white bear with black bits...

I like this, you...a lot...

Ah, I do love a good short poem...

K

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2 posted 2003-04-10 06:45 AM


kaile - awesome write here - sometimes only some of us see . . .  xxoo
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3 posted 2003-04-10 07:25 AM


so glad to see the shades...

regards,
sudhir

Margherita
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4 posted 2003-04-10 09:30 AM


... indeed it's high time to be aware of the changes... of white that is no more white ...
Wisely stated!
Love, Margherita

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5 posted 2003-04-10 11:16 AM


Kaile, you are so good at writing these
short poems. You put so much truth into
them. Keep writing and we'll keep reading.  
Hugs,
Ethel

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6 posted 2003-04-10 11:25 AM



Kaile,

I have to admit my first reaction to this, more revealing than perhaps I should share, is: "No, the polar bear is tainted in blood!".....

Interesting write...causes me to think....something at which you are very good!!!  I like this...

Thank you, Hugs, Pat

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kaile
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7 posted 2003-04-10 11:49 AM


Hi K, it was a surprise to see your name on my thread..thanks for taking the time out to respond and i'm so glad you liked this ditty as well...your approval makes me feel that i have done good...and i'm also surprised to learn that you have a soft spot for short poems, considering the poems i have read from you ...anyway, in case you come back, i havent got around to editing the Photographer piece yet (shame on me) but thanks to your excellent critique the other time, I have been trying to think more like a poet..i think my work has improved a weeny bit and it's all thanks to you

littlewing, thanks for replying..though i guess it's easier for other people to spot your flaws than to spot them yourself, no?

Sudhir, thanks for the cheer from your reply

Margherita, "white that is no longer white"...that kinda left an ache in me..i guess i'm implying that in my piece myself but nothing like reading your sentiments straight-to-your-face...anyway, man, some things should be allowed to stay constant

Ethel, what a huge compliment! thanks a bunch

Pat, "tainted in blood" now that would be appropriate as well, considering how these polar bears are an endangered species...though i used "algae" because i visited the zoo last weekend and saw the polar bears dressing these algae coats...i guess it's hard to rear these animals in a tropical country

thanks all..i didn't expect so many replies actually  

[This message has been edited by kaile (04-10-2003 11:51 AM).]

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8 posted 2003-04-10 12:00 PM


What do you mean, you don't expect a number of replies?  LOL...give us a minute to sit back and reflect!  Hugs you!

          Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

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