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LUV_R_GIRL2379
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0 posted 2003-04-12 01:26 AM


THE HOUSE

The house still stands
though its occupants went astray
The wind blew the seeds of love
so very far away
Where once abundant flowers grew
there is only the morning dew
An empty space that portrays my heart
nothing stays the same, everything departs.

The windows are so dark
yet they're tunnels to my past
I replay every day we lived here
right up to the very last
Everything looks so different and lonely
not at all like it used to be.

Goodbye came and turned it all upside down
Heartache came and shattered our dreams all around
And all it left was a heart so full hurt and a house so empty
It's all the proof i need,i'll never again let anyone see this heart inside of me.


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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2003-04-12 02:32 AM


Fabulous...expresses my feelings well...then but not now...James
Kethry
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2 posted 2003-04-12 02:39 AM


wonderful metaphor of what makes a house and what makes a home.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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3 posted 2003-04-12 10:44 AM


LuvRGirl~

'tunnels to my past'

Oh wow !  I've had to dig through a few of those myself~

An insightful penning~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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regards2you
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4 posted 2003-04-12 11:17 AM




Awww...sad...an empty house certainly does reflect a broken relationship, sometimes seems the spirit of both, just gone, no light left in either.

Your wrote this well.

Enjoyed greatly,

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Seymour Tabin
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5 posted 2003-04-12 12:18 PM


LUV_R_GIRL2379
WEll thank you for this look, excellent write.

LUV_R_GIRL2379
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6 posted 2003-04-12 03:53 PM


thanks guys for all your replies! i appreciate it so much!
     ~~~HUGS FOR EVERYONE~~~
           luv_r_girl2379

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