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brian sites
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0 posted 2003-04-09 03:19 AM


we both found each other's
     living tombs
and tore the self-woven shrouds
        from our faces

caught the newborn breaths
                with our own

and reached into the other's breast
      (found)

we hold the other's heart
       on raised-arm thrones

and when we face each other
our arms...
    our ecstatic faces...
they make the
      unbroken path

of infinity



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Sudhir Iyer
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1 posted 2003-04-09 05:05 AM


a very interesting write... muchly enjoyed... particularly this
"we hold the other's heart
       on raised-arm thrones"

regards,
sudhir

redheart angrybraids
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2 posted 2003-04-09 07:30 AM


beautiful words,

Kindly,
Redheart Angrybraids


serenity blaze
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3 posted 2003-04-09 10:37 AM


you...recognize the sacred in all things.

"raised-arm thrones"

You stun me.

The beauty of the visuals, the truth that I KNOW you know,and sweet poet, you write with an easy confidence these days. Like pulling silk threads into tapestry...oh, I want a book of YOU. (toldya I was greedy)

Aenimal
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4 posted 2003-04-09 10:14 PM


This mean you're back posting regularly..i hope so
LUV_R_GIRL2379
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5 posted 2003-04-10 12:43 PM


this poem wasd truly amazing and beautiful! your use of words lets the reader imagine exactly what your talking about! very impressive!! by the way are you from iowa?
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6 posted 2003-04-10 01:37 AM


we both found each other's
     living tombs
and tore the self-woven shrouds
        from our faces


Another master of the visual.

Imagine all the People living life in peace...
John Lennon

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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7 posted 2003-04-10 09:51 PM


Brian - you just hit it all to homebase - sitting here speechless truly - I FEEL this . . .   quite amazing xxoo
brian sites
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8 posted 2003-04-11 04:00 AM


I smile at you guys

I'm just trying to explain
myself

thank you...for reading
and listening

wranx
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since 2002-06-07
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Moved from a shack to a barn
9 posted 2003-04-11 11:32 AM


I saw this as a circlar thing....I still do.

I see most things that way, but, I'll come around (snicker).

Sunkissed
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10 posted 2003-04-11 12:03 PM


Brian, your words whisper like a prayer between during a most sacred moment.

Lovely writing.

Sunkissed.

LUV_R_GIRL2379
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11 posted 2003-04-11 07:17 PM


brian~~
hi! do u mind if i ask if u are from newton,iowa..there was  a guy i used to talk to one yahoo chat alot..that i havent chatted with forever..just curious ..i used to be sweetie21 on yahoo if that helps.
any how plz let me know...
thanks a bunch!

Midnitesun
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Gaia
12 posted 2003-04-11 09:56 PM


interesting imagery
enjoyable
unique
unshrouded honesty?

brian sites
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13 posted 2003-04-12 02:32 AM


luvr girl......
no I am not from there and dont know you
but thanks for reading!

thank you sunkissed

and Kacy?
yes.....
the gray blanket is gone
and there is nothing but the color of honesty
the color of skin
remaining
and it is good
thank you

LUV_R_GIRL2379
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since 2003-04-09
Posts 42

14 posted 2003-04-12 03:43 AM


brian~
thank you for your time! it was MY PLEASURE to read your work
               thanks again
                LUV_R_GIRL2379

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