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IcyFlamez89
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since 2003-02-14

Posts 292
Jersey City NJ

0 posted 2003-04-08 08:35 PM

I just read J.A. London's DOPPLEGANGER and Howard Bergerson's EDNA WATERFALL. I thought, WOW. I tried makin one, but it was too hard to do it by letter so i did a palindrome by line. I hope you guys think it's good.
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Such a Fool

I keep on walking this cruel road,
My soul shattered.
My heart broken.
Such a fool I am.
Pouring my heart out
For someone who doesn't care.
Why do I torture myself?
Why won't my heart let me stop?
Night after night
Day after day
I keep on weeping.
Such a fool...
Such a fool.
I keep on weeping
day after day.
Night after night.
Why won't my heart let me stop?
Why do I torture myself
for someone who doesn't care?
Pouring my heart out...
such a fool I am.
My heart broken,
my soul shattered,
I keep on walking this cruel road.
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Well? Watcha think? Not bad for my fisrt time. Quite fun actually, lollz.

[This message has been edited by IcyFlamez89 (04-09-2003 01:04 AM).]

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2003-04-08 11:10 PM

Well, I am impressed...I had to go look up and remind myself what a palindrome was...
and while Im not familiar with this form of structured poetry...it didnt take away from appreciating the expressions you emoted in this write. Thats an impressive reading list you have too...I think its excellent you are being exposed to so many different influences and talent...it can only help your poetry grow. Well done poet sir

"and when we get to the pearly gates ...
we'll find what we called our sins were just mistakes."

Tom Kimmel

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

2 posted 2003-04-09 12:38 PM

Welcome to Passions. I don't I've read you yet. I am not well read so can't appreciate your notes as well as Janet did. Also I've no source to reference this form; wondered if you could be more specific.

Liked the content, it read smoothly.

I wonder if you know there is a poetry workshop forum here and once a month a new form of writing poetry is offered.
Think you'll really enjoy it.

Hugs to you, and I look forward to reading more of your poems.

Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

IcyFlamez89
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since 2003-02-14

Posts 292
Jersey City NJ

3 posted 2003-04-09 01:00 AM

Well, it's not really a true form. Since a palindrome is anyhing that is the same backwards and forwars (eg mom, dad), you can make a palindrome poem my making sure it is like a mirror, meaning you caould read it from top to bottom or bottom to top and it would still be the same. My palindrome is very simple because i did it by lines and phrases. Some writers make a palinedrome by letters which quite difficult. Here's a example of a palindrome phrase: A man, a plan, a canal-Panama. (if you say it backwards it still says the same thing.) If you happen to read Doppleganger or Edna Waterfall, it is much easier to understand what Im saying. Im never good at explaining things(which is why my Open Ended Responses for English Honors stinks like a wet dog) so I hope you can get the jist of my ramble

Nan

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since 1999-05-20

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4 posted 2003-04-09 08:39 AM

Very nice - We're doing Acrostics and Palindromes in the workshop this month if you'd care to join us...

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

5 posted 2003-04-09 12:27 PM

Thanks for the clarity. When I've more time, I shall study it more..and, I, too should look into the workshop...or, I'd have known...

So glad you are here...look forward to more of your work.

Hugs, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Krystopher Morris
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since 2002-11-11

Posts 130
Ancient land called Chivalry

6 posted 2003-04-09 12:34 PM

Interesting Style...Thanks for sharing and informing!

Poetry is love and love is life.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

7 posted 2003-04-09 06:43 PM

It's good to see someone having FUN with new forms of writing. I enjoyed this post.

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