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Streen
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0 posted 2003-04-08 04:47 PM


Sub arbore lux

The moon sparkles like
a star tonight, willow tree,
I sit there watching it
drown your dry boughs,
,thin little slivers of leaves.

It was long ago, I recall,
when I watched the sun
(sparkling like a moon)
from branch to leaf on you.
I (was better than light then
.)

remember whispering secrets
into the loft of your wispy branches-
my breath pittering with drips, drops.
Sometimes  the breeze would rustle
and  I could hear you murmur to the roots.

Then, (for when clouds can move to greener skies),
I drifted away.
And you cracked with the wind.

Ah, willow tree, maybe now
I know why your blossoms grew dust,
for spring ran by and
I (fragilely) drifted away.

If mists could will, I would
my clouds against your
silky leaves--
and break the light
of the moon like a star.

And then maybe you (frailly)
could glisten with life again.

© Copyright 2003 Derek Benz - All Rights Reserved
Margherita
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1 posted 2003-04-08 05:15 PM


Very beautiful. I so love poems about trees and I love willow trees ..... see how it glows in the sunshine ...



Love, Margherita

Brad Majors
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Georgia
2 posted 2003-04-08 05:29 PM


Beautiful
Streen
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3 posted 2003-04-08 05:34 PM


Thank ye very muchly.

I have to admit that this is somewhat of an older poem, but which I have recently been editing quite a bit of.

wranx
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4 posted 2003-04-08 06:14 PM


Streen, you're a youngster by the look of ya. But, you seem to know your craft. This shows a fine hand, yessir.


~wranx


"The shortest distance between two points is.....sometimes intolerable"

~Bukowski~

[This message has been edited by wranx (04-08-2003 06:15 PM).]

JamesMichael
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5 posted 2003-04-08 06:25 PM


Enjoyed...James
Earth Angel
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6 posted 2003-04-09 10:36 AM


If you write like a poet, have the soul of a poet, then a poet you must be!  

From a fellow tree lover,
Warm hugs,
Earth Angel

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7 posted 2003-04-09 12:20 PM


Streen - this is awesome, and yes, should be in the book!! Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

Krystopher Morris
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8 posted 2003-04-09 12:29 PM


Wow...Powerful read! Thanks for sharing!

Poetry is love and love is life.

BluesSerenade
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9 posted 2003-04-10 09:24 PM


So fragile, and beautifully expressed.

If mists could will, I would
my clouds against your
silky leaves--
and break the light

So nice~



Enchantress
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10 posted 2003-04-10 09:28 PM


Yes..so beautiful!  One for the book!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

garysgirl
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11 posted 2003-04-10 10:15 PM


Streen, I love trees and this poem,
so I vote for it to be in the book.  

"Love makes the world go around"
~with love and hugs from Ethel__GG~  
                  

Dark Angel
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12 posted 2003-04-10 10:49 PM


I absolutely love trees.
This is beautifully written.

Maree

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