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Lacey's Arkansas Rain
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Lacey's Arkansas Rain |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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She wanted so badly to go back To a time when things where simple When insecurities not so heavy When her dress had slipped off easily It brought tears to her eyes To see their place in temporary ruin Like life, something had disturbed it Leaving it undistinguishable From what it had been before She silently wondered If that were how her and Travis would end up His voice brought her back From the murkiness of mud and thought “Where to?” he asked Away from the destruction, she thought “I don’t care,” she whispered “Anywhere.” As she watched him put it in reverse And start backing up She wondered if he knew how much She longed to scoot closer Just to feel the comfort of him Yet she couldn’t bring herself to do it Sighing, she turns to look out the window It was so tiring Being scared “Sometimes I just want to run,” she said As tears slid down her face. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
LOL... I see I now have a shadow to follow the perpsective of travis with one from Lacey.. Bravo!!! Well done.... like the first it follows the story line and adds to the character of Lacey. I agree with Duncan.. you are a natural.. hope to see more... hmmm... now that lacey is being written and the other characters as well.. perhaps it is time I create a new one...and see if anyone relates to it enough to begin to write it.. LMAO... yeah right... like that's going to happen. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Susan...you've been reading, and reading well...and picking up a voice for Lacey...this is good gal...very good! It's going to get better, too! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Susan, Very good indepth writing. Enjoyed. (Yeah, he knew!) Looking forward to more of you building this character from a female's perspective... enjoyed, hugs, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Pure genius perspective on this character! |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
up so someone else can read this gem |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful!! You zoomed right in on Lacey! Extremely well done! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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