Making a Commitment, Breaking a promise

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EllinneT
Junior Member

since 2003-04-04

Posts 12

0 posted 2003-04-07 09:46 PM

     Making a Commitment, Breaking a Promise

I thought i knew you,
          until you used me.
        You lied about saying,
             you loved me,
      You lied about everything,
         you said or did to me.
            You played me,
like I was one of,
your easy video games.
Those two years,
I shed so many tears.
   You called me easy,
and acted like what we had together,
didnt even matter.
You deney all the things you say,
so you wouldn't lose a friend.
    Deep down inside,
I know you can't let go,
cause when I see you two together,
    you always let it show.
I know when you get what you want from her,
     you will break her heart,
       like you once did me,
and would soon come crawling back,
     begging on your knees.
      I thought this is what I had with you,
when you made a commitment,
    and broke a promise.
I know that love is as crazy,
     as it seems, but when you find that special person,
you want to spend all eternity with them.

                   EllinneT

leighsa
Member

since 2003-02-27

Posts 74
Oregon, United States Of America

1 posted 2003-04-07 09:50 PM

Gosh EllinneT, i REALLY LOVE YOUR POEM if you posted it as a poem to get intoa book i would vote try to make it so that people can vote....
Welcome to Passions in Poetry......
Ashgiel

dreambuilder
Member

since 2003-03-23

Posts 319
caddyshack

2 posted 2003-04-08 08:49 PM

nice write - look forward to more

welcome to PIP

. . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream . . .

regards2you
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since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

3 posted 2003-04-08 09:04 PM

~Welcome to Passions~

Heart felt, though painful first poem, expressing feelings quite well.

Hugs to you, Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2003-04-08 09:21 PM

WELCOME TO PASSIONS!
Much enjoyed your first post!
I look forward to seeing more of your work.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

5 posted 2003-04-08 10:56 PM

hi PoetFriend...
Hugs of welcome go out2you and my compliments on sharing this touching write...
Smiles2u
*~coco~*

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2003-04-08 11:18 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Love should NEVER be treated like some kind of ridiculous videogame, the difficulties should be accepted and treated with compassion and understanding! I send many angel hugs your way, this is a heartfelt debut! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

7 posted 2003-04-09 03:37 AM

Elinne - Welocme to PIP! You will love it here . . . xxoo

Sunshine

Administrator

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

8 posted 2003-04-09 02:22 PM

Welcome to Passions! Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting!

Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

Justbleu
Member Elite

since 1999-08-31

Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)

9 posted 2003-04-09 02:26 PM

Welcome To Passions!!!!
Sad poem!!!! He didn't deserve you!!!

Bridgette

"Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown

bslicker

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since 2000-12-04

Posts 2321
state of mind

10 posted 2003-04-09 03:14 PM

Welcome

Bernie

A smile a day keeps the world in smile's.
Bernie Slicker

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2003-04-09 03:17 PM

Welcome to Pips.
It doesn't sound as if this one was YOUR special lifetime companion. good luck on finding a more suitable companion.

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2003-04-10 04:30 AM

Enjoyed...James

Ringo

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since 2003-02-20

Posts 3684
Saluting with misty eyes

13 posted 2003-04-10 10:08 AM

Welcome to Passions!!!! This was an absolutely phenominal first write. I am very much looking forward to reading more from you.
I also agree with leighsa... you should edit this to check the box to put it in the book.
You would have my vote.

When the morning cries and you don't know why...

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