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Toss and Turn |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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Sighing between dreams my breath purrs in the toss and turn stepping lightly down the stairs without tripping over. Willing myself to hold on cluttered thoughts stacked to the side collecting in the darkness. Stained by the backwards climb up and down in the middle worn into the carpet night walks lightly on tip toes. Where stillness resides in that waking hour when sleep escapes my eyes empty sounds echo on hard tiles. The ice maker hums crushing and cold the fish tank bubbles my heart stirs restlessly. Keeping me company in the silence. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssss) Oh Lori, this is painfully detailed, sweet friend, even when we have company it can still feel petrifying when clocks tock but there is no breathing, I too know this feeling, I send many hugs your way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
a wonderful write. may the remainder of your night be filled with peaceful dreams. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, That'll change.  Excellent write.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Noah~ Thank you for your warm light~ Hi Edder~ What a nice reply you left for me! Thanks, and a belated welcome to you. Dear Larry~ There's got to be a balance in there somewhere. Thanks you~ |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Lori, There is a balance in your poetry which I dearly enjoy. You've manage to capture many of my moments. Hugs, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
dream me awake...a personal, insightful share. your poetry has such a honest feel. Rf |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lori, when the silence is there, every sound seems to roar, doesn't it? I've known this. heart Hugs, Ethel |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
I have known that silence when I have been away from home and miss those dear to me  Loved this poem |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
When the quiet overcomes you.. every noise seems so much louder. Well done. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Krystopher Morris Member
since 2002-11-11
Posts 130Ancient land called Chivalry |
Wonderful thoughts swarming! Thanks fors sharing! Poetry is love and love is life. |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
BluesBabe, I saw the balance...it was that alone thing.  If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I could do without the crushed ice but I love the bubbles and the light that glows in my fish tank. I'm telling you, that's all there is in the middle of the night. Just me and my blanky wrapped up in the sound of silence. Thank you, thank you everyone!! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well bluesy, add to this two dogs snoring....and it's a night here in the shack. Actually, this is nicely lonely...If there is such a thing. I hear these echoes |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
~Nicely lonely~ That's an inspiring thought~ I think there is such a thing, like the bubbles that burst...we learn to filter through them. Thanks wranx~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Goodness Bluesy - I know this . . . kind of like not wanting the day to break sometimes . . . always amazing me xxoo |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
you write about the shades of blue very well... things will get brighter... they have to... regards, sudhir |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah yes...the familiar company in the silence...I know that well. Hugs to you...a beautifully sad write. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
funny at times that silence in and of itself can bea comfort... the absence of an antogonist can lead to a silence that somforts as well as scares.. well written..as usual. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'The ice maker hums crushing and cold the fish tank bubbles my heart stirs restlessly. Keeping me company in the silence.' I used to love the sound of an aquarium at night. Now it's mostly just the hum of the frig. Sometimes, I sleep with the TV on the cartoon channel.....makes for funny dreams!!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
That kind of silence can be thunderous in the stillness of lonely night...  ~ May your nights be restful and your dreams be sweet! Warm hugs, Linda |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Me thinks it's in the silence of the night that one best hears, best listens to ones self, to the beat of ones pulse, to the sound of ones breath, to the silence inside where all ones secrets reside. And it's in the silence of the night that one meets one’s best friends, the crowd that lives inside – the happy, the sad, mad, wild, witty, shy, spontaneous, outlandish, wonderfully beautiful and enigmatic entities of . . . Self. Truly it's in the silence you’ve described that one can truly be alone – yet kept company by a crowd. Cool write, my friend. jwesley |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks littlewing~ It's like the longest hour that drags on and on. I do appreciate your nice replies~ James~ I'm glad you did, and I'm happy to see you here. thanks~ Sudhir~ Shady eh? You're right though, better to look on the bright side. Thank you for your kind words. You know you are had when the silence becomes all too familiar~ Hugs Dixie dear~ Cpat~ Thank you for those wise words of yours. I'm always looking for that comfort zone~ Cartoon dreams, oh boy that would be fun for a change! Think of all the possibilities and animation to work with! Thank you for your light hearted humor Duncan~ I hope that means your smiling~ Linda~ Isn't that the truth, and what a concept it is! Hugs back at you~ |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Hey James~ I didn't see you there! What a comforting reply, keeping company with the crowd inside! Awww yes~ Thank you so much for your thoughtful reply. |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Blues~ A perfect time to hear your heart beat and the thoughts echo within your mind. To be aware of everything and not be distracted by it all. Enjoyed...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" |
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