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BrokenBird New Member
since 2003-04-05
Posts 7United States |
Mirror in my heart, can you reflect the damage I've perused through? Shuffling the stacks of carded dreams the dust of too much contrition has made them innocuous and all the glossiness fades from their brittle corners. Mirror, tell me the uncertainty so clearly displayed yet lost in the aloof mannerisms of a woman and show what might have been had I allowed the landslide of love bury me in its amnesty. To trace my name upon your surface is to immortalize the aeons its been since I've visited last. I've forgotten how remote the mirror of a heart can be when you store the bereavement of a life in unmarked boxes. To reveal the contents is to revisit the demons penance bringing the strongest to their knees. And to face the mirror again tells you nothing but what might have been. |
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INclan Senior Member
since 1999-07-20
Posts 1024Indiana, USA |
Welcome! A good first Offering. I look forward to reading more of your work. I specially liked the following: I've forgotten how remote the mirror of a heart can be when you store the bereavement of a life in unmarked boxes. To reveal the contents is to revisit the demons penance bringing the strongest to their knees. INclan |
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BrokenBird New Member
since 2003-04-05
Posts 7United States |
Thank you, InClan. Broken Bird |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
 Enjoyed your first post!! Chris |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome to this blue passionate attic. I enjoyed this write, even in its sadness, especially this: I've forgotten how remote the mirror of a heart can be when you store the bereavement of a life in unmarked boxes. To reveal the contents is to revisit the demons penance bringing the strongest to their knees |
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Ivy Rose Senior Member
since 2001-12-29
Posts 1300MA, USA |
BrokenBird...An outstanding job!!!!! Loved this poem and your style of writing. These are the lines that I felt were the most powerful: I've forgotten how remote the mirror of a heart can be when you store the bereavement of a life in unmarked boxes. To reveal the contents is to revisit the demons penance bringing the strongest to their knees. And to face the mirror again tells you nothing but what might have been. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Welcome to Passions!!!!!! With writing like this, you will indeed be on my list of Check First!!!! I lok forward to reading more from you. Imagine all the People living life in peace... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS!! I so much enjoyed your first post! Looking forward to seeing more of our work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Alicethruglass Member
since 2001-06-19
Posts 368 |
love it ~A |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  Yay! Oh Kelly, this is wonderful, dearest friend, this is a wonderful and introspective debut, sadly we have many regrets like this but also know they can be overcome and dealt with, yay, you truly are beautiful and promise us you'll always see that in the mirror! Welcome to Passions, sweet Kelly, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Kelly, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (04-06-2003 08:57 PM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Welcome to Passions! I look forward to more! |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
I especially liked this part And to face the mirror again tells you nothing but what might have been. welcome to PIP - look forward to more . . . all that we see is but a dream within a dream . . . |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
BrokenBird...Emotive and honest writing...Welcome to Passions! |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
"Mirror, tell me the uncertainty so clearly displayed yet lost in the aloof mannerisms of a woman and show what might have been had I allowed the landslide of love bury me in its amnesty." Hugs of welcome go out2u and I compliment you on this splendid write... I gotta tell ya the verse I quote above just took my breath away it is soooooooo good... *~coco~* [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (04-08-2003 11:04 PM).] |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Kelli - Welcome to PIP! Nice write here: To reveal the contents is to revisit the demons penance bringing the strongest to their knees You will love it here . . . xxoo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Mirror, tell me the uncertainty so clearly displayed yet lost in the aloof mannerisms Wonderful clarity you possess! *Welcome* BrokenBird~ |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This is a great first post....Hope you read a lot more from you!!!! Welcome To Passions!!!! Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
OOps.... Bridgette "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown [This message has been edited by Justbleu (04-10-2003 10:12 PM).] |
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