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Edder
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since 2003-04-02
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0 posted 2003-04-03 08:46 PM



I do not profess to be a poet, but there are times when the union of pen and paper produce results favorable to my eye. I hope you feel the same.

As passion rises high,
you breathe and then you sigh.
I trace your lips with a finger tip
and I gaze into your eyes.
Deep pools of blue,
I'm lost in you.
My thoughts run wild...
You shyly smile,
then softly kiss my lips...
Sweet embrace; beautiful face,
you slowly pull away...
A perfect ending; a perfect night,
awash in the glow of the front porch light,
I breathe and then I sigh
as passion says.... Goodbye.



© Copyright 2003 Edder - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
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Between the Lines
1 posted 2003-04-03 09:14 PM


very sweetly done *s I enjoyed your thoughts
M

Edder
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2 posted 2003-04-03 09:41 PM


Thank you M. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Your kind words have eased my apprehension.
dreambuilder
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since 2003-03-23
Posts 319
caddyshack
3 posted 2003-04-03 10:10 PM


definately a southern ending
to a wonderful evening
Brought me back

welcome & I look forward to more

garysgirl
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since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237
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4 posted 2003-04-03 10:15 PM


I enjoyed your poem and look forward
to reading more of your work.

Oh, guess what...we are  all apprehensive
in the beginning. At least you didn't make the
mistakes I did trying to post my first one.

I hope you enjoy it here.  

Hugs,
Ethel

Edder
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since 2003-04-02
Posts 671

5 posted 2003-04-03 10:29 PM


dreambuilder   thank you from the bottom of my southern heart. your welcome is most appreciated.

Ethel   thanks for the words of encouragement. i've been lurking here for a few days thanks to my wonderful friend KoKo and though i may be somewhat out of my league as a poster i'm sure enjoying the reading.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655
New York
6 posted 2003-04-04 04:35 AM


Edder - I loved this:

Deep pools of blue,
I'm lost in you.

What a beautiful write . . .  xxoo

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215
Realms of Light
7 posted 2003-04-04 08:59 AM


Welcome to Passions!--and from your first post, I'd say you have come to the right place!



Warm, welcoming hugs,
Earth Angel

[This message has been edited by Earth Angel (04-04-2003 09:00 AM).]

Margherita
Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
8 posted 2003-04-04 09:34 AM


Welcome to Passions. You have written a very lovely poem and the rhythm is very nice too.
Love, Margherita

Edder
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since 2003-04-02
Posts 671

9 posted 2003-04-04 10:22 AM


littlewing   thank you so much. i'm glad you enjoyed it. your kind words have brought joy to my heart.

Earth Angel  i hope you still feel that way after you've read some of my other ramblings

Margherita   thanks for the warm welcome. i feel at home already. you have an amazing group of friends here.

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