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bklynboy
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florida

0 posted 2003-04-03 08:30 PM


She chases a rainbow
and looks for signs,

in stars above
she puts her faith,

and watches for the sky
to write her name
beside mine,

as clouds roll by and dissipate
she tracks a wisp
and looks for me,

then strains to hear
the resonate,
in songs
among the chimes of wind,

i sit and wait,
and take it in,
as i've become her rock
through fate,
the shelter in her storms within,

she knows by now
she's in my heart,
in friendship
and in common bond,
of 2 who wear the ball and chain,
finding freedom's flight,
in paths that reach and touch
some times,

as i've become the earth
to her,
and she's become
my sky,

and as for now,
we fill the space
with heart and soul
and warm embrace,
between each other's
deepest void


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2003-04-04 06:40 AM



I am liking this one
very much.
I have no critique of this, Brooklyn...
just a sense of thanks...
for having touched the earth
then sky...
this soars!

        Karilea - If I whisper, will you listen?...

bklynboy
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florida
2 posted 2003-04-04 03:10 PM


Thanks for the message. I was afraid no one liked what I wrote. I am not always looking for a critique. Knowing I have an audience, good bad or indifferent is enough.
littlewing
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since 2003-03-02
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3 posted 2003-04-04 03:20 PM


Brooklyn - this is beautiful - I loved it - and dont ever be afraid of anyone likeing your writing - write for you and for her . . . write to write - this is beautiful - a nice persepctive . . . xxoo
Sunshine
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4 posted 2003-04-04 03:21 PM


Now Brooklyn...I may be good, certainly I've been bad...but I've never been indifferent!  
Midnitesun
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Gaia
5 posted 2003-04-04 03:38 PM


Absolutely beautiful. You both are very lucky to have this close relationship.
LastMoments
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6 posted 2003-04-04 04:06 PM


This writing is so well written and perfect for the topic you chose.  Really well done man,  keep up the good work.
JamesMichael
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7 posted 2003-04-04 05:19 PM


Nice writing...James
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